I Met Love

Use to be I'd wake up in the morning
Change my mind, I have to get going

Use to be I'd meet you in the evening
Change of plans, I've got to be leaving

Tell you how much I adored you
Change the game, pretend to ignore you

Then I met love
It told me to stop being half a man
Get down on your knees
And beg that shes still got you in her plans

Use to be I'd show up at your frontdoor
After drinks with her, expecting more

Always finding ways to keep it my way
Never thinking much of the role that you played

Then I met love
And it made me do what I should have done
Spend the day being the best part of you
And then ask for another one

Then I met love
And I made it your life and not mine
Giving you memories to the bone
Then thanking you for giving me the time

Hello My observations (though not wanted...) She's got you in her plans. this is good but I would change to " she still has you in her plans" Either would work, just that the beat to my version seems to match the rhythm better. Explain showing up at front door having drinks with her. Is there 2 woman that you are talking about? Or is it her that you are having drinks with? I also think you need to wrap up the story in one more stanza. What is this "to the bone" statement? It does not go in the context of the message. Finish the story, what happened? Did you get together? Did it not work out? Did she tell you to screw off? let me know how it ended. It is good concept but you have to complete the story

Hi B, everything you said was correct, you are right about your observations..........needs work for sure, thanks for reading, Orsen.

keep developing Orsen! make it complete