Kiss My Heart

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  1. MoonRide*r*'s Avatar

    MoonRide*r* said:

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    When I first met you, something happened
    that was a total surprise
    I had dreamed about you before,
    but then I looked into your eyes...

    I saw the most tender angel, my love,
    the sweetest soul that could ever be
    And when we first kissed, I couldn't believe
    what was happening to me

    You took me to the stars
    with just one look
    And then you kissed my heart
    Oh I could write a book ...

    A perfect love story
    The most exquisite song ...
    But then I left you to wonder
    What went wrong

    There's no answer now...

    My baby, forever you will ever be
    The sweetest dream that couldn't happen to me
    Do you know, please tell me you can see
    That I would die to live with you in eternity

    Our perfect love story
    We sang the sweetest song
    But I left you to wonder
    Just what went wrong

    You wanted me to be
    The one who was strong
    But I left you broken...
    Wondering what went wrong

    And for us I cry

    The days are gone, we can't recover
    But I refuse to accept that our dream is over
    Baby can you just save the dream with me?
    Can we write it in history so others can see?

    Our perfect love story
    We sang the sweetest song
    In exquisite harmony
    In love so sweet and strong

    My baby, forever you will ever be
    The sweetest dream that couldn't happen to me
    Do you know, please tell me you can see
    That I would die to live with you in eternity

    Nothing is impossible
    We lived it for a time and now
    You'll always be my baby
    In all timelessness of time

    My baby! Forever you will ever be
    The sweetest dream that couldn't happen to me
    Do you know, please tell me you can see
    That I would die to live with you in eternity

    You wanted me to be
    The one who was strong
    But I left you crying in wonder
    Of what went wrong

    Our perfect love story
    We sang the sweetest song
    In exquisite harmony
    In love so sweet and strong

    And forever I cry
    (I love you)

    ~ ~ ~

    This is not finished, not assembled as I want, but I wanted to put it out here. The last line would be something like the end of the song Unintended (Muse). Otherwise I'm wide open to suggestions and even the toughest criticism... I love the idea of this, and I would really love to pull it together and finish the music. But I do need to compress some of the lyrics... among other things ... maybe lose the last verse/chorus iteration, or even more, whatever... Any help?
    Last edited by MoonRide*r*; 12-28-2010 at 10:34 PM.
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    Bump. Just want this to be above the last one I posted
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    I saw the most tender angel, my love,
    the sweetest soul that could ever be
    And when we first kissed, I couldn't believe
    what was happening to me

    You took me to the stars
    with just one look
    And then you kissed my heart
    Oh I could write a book ...

    .This.Reminds.Me.Of.Painful.Things. *sniff*
    Everything you write is awesome and gets to my heart immediately.
    [Today] is the *tomorrow* you worried about ~yesterday~.Live for the ♥next day♥, not the ◘day before◘.
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Angel ... <3
    Thank you soooo so much, as always
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    Nanashi said:

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    A new favourite by you! I am surprised it is not yet finished, it sounds so near complete. Just a little longer I assume? This is so beautiful and it flows so well...You will have to do something with these besides post it here.
     
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    greenpanda8868 said:

    Thumbs up

    I really liked it. You're really good. I like how you interperted the idea of the story behind the lyrics. For next song, try staying to that subject and not straying away with more words of feeling. Over-all, though, really good.
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Thanks for your comment and as to your suggestion, I can only say that this whole thing is the subject, the story. Maybe it's too complicated but it's an honest lyrical intrepretation of a beginning and an end. Or a never-end
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    Nanashi thanks so much, as always!
    I can't be around long today, had a bad sinus infection over the weekend and and my face and eyes still kinda bother me. I'll catch up soon.

    Happy New Year to you all and whoever else might drop through here

    Edit: Btw, this is finished, except for a final decision on music and maybe a little rearranging of verses/chorus.
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    MiT said:

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    like this
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Thanks bud!
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    OneSongWayne said:

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    I really like the way this progresses. The flow is excellent. Some beautiful thought and play on words. I really like it. Great lyrics!!! Make minor adjustments as needed when you create the music, but keep as much of these lyrics intact as possible. This song should be produced.

    Well done! Awesome!
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Thanks so much Wayne, and believe me I'm gonna put it to music sometime in the next few months. Wish I could say sooner, but that's the best I can say for now. Again thanks a bunch
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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