I know it's shorter but I think it's better, that's for you to decide though. Not me. Oppinions?
I can't breath like I'm bein' strangled,
It's like all the time my whole bodies entangled,
under ropes and vines, complicated since birth,
like a rebelious child I was born feet first,
I wish that my stress would just lift,
a hot air baloon, on a helium trip,
voice pitched like Josh Beckett,
every line, you drop you need to ****in' check it,
all my lines,- this ****, they'll just wreck it,
happiness don't come from spittin',
true players in this game know, no quittin',
(Also I'm not really satisfied with the 2 lines after "Voice pitched like Josh Beckett" any advice for what I could throw in there? Advice in general is appreciated.)