Desire No Longer

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  1. MinDaElliMaYa'Reouf said:

    Default Desire No Longer

    You seem uninteresting
    I used to sit frozen and watch you undressing
    It’s not that impressing
    All so fast

    I feel indifferent
    I rarely ask myself where the passion went
    Not even that intent
    On making it last

    I’m not sure how this works out
    Where we go from here
    Don’t know what it’s about
    Or if it ever becomes clear

    Chorus
    I’m not sorry
    I don’t worry
    I don’t mourn you
    That's just the truth
    I’m not nervous
    Doesn’t get worse
    I don’t hunger
    Desire no longer, no longer

    Though you’re trying
    As ever, like always, now it’s unsatisfying
    Descends into crying
    You know it

    I’m not open
    Don’t wish to argue with what the heart has spoken
    I’ve been woken
    Can’t sink back too it

    I’m not sure how this works out
    Where I go from here
    Don’t know what it’s about
    Or if it ever becomes clear

    Chorus
    I’m not sorry
    I don’t worry
    I don’t mourn you
    That's just the truth
    I’m not nervous
    Doesn’t get worse
    I don’t hunger
    Desire no longer, no longer

    Copyright Y-K R-B
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Maybe you can change "Or if it ever becomes clear" to just "It'll never be clear"? Just a thought.

    I especially love the first two verses. You really grabbed me right up front with this one.
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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  3. MinDaElliMaYa'Reouf said:

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    I see where you're going with that, are you thinking that the change keeps more in line with the verbal flow?
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Yeah I was thinking just a minor tweak for the verbal flow. But when I reread it, it's probably fine just the way it is
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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