That Girl <3

There's a girl
And she's sad
She's sittin' by the window
Everyday waiting to feel happy
But she'll keep on waiting for a while

(Chorus)
Thar girl sits by the window
And she's still waiting on a guy
To make her smile
But until that day will come
She'll keep on sittin by that window

That girls still sits by that window
She watches the world pass her by
The new neighbours are moving in
She looks at them smile
That boy turns around and sees her by that window

(Chorus)
Thar girl sits by the window
And she's still waiting on a guy
To make her smile
But until that day will come
She'll keep on sittin by that window

She still sits by that window
Watching that boy
He always looks her way and smiles
But she's too shy to smile back
SO she just turns away

(Chorus)
Thar girl sits by the window
And she's still waiting on a guy
To make her smile
But until that day will come
She'll keep on sittin by that window

(Bridge)
She sits wonderin' when she'll smile again
Wonderin' if he will ever think of her that way
Wondering just what if...

That girl sat by the window
All day long
But that boy watched her everyday
Until one day he walked to her and said "Hey"
ANd she smiled

Oh oh oh yeah she smiled
For the first time--

There's always a guy thinking/feeling the same way. Nice little ditty SmileyGal

awwww thanxx moonride42
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any other thoughts?? i can take critics. i would love some more feedback..

thanx
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I definitely see growth in your writing which is so good. I'd say try be more descriptive with it though. It's your imagination, it's your ideas and feelings, have fun with it. Let the reader into your mind and emotions. Let them feel how you were/are feeling in that moment. I think you'll get there as you grow and experience more. Even the great writers are still growing in their writing. Don't be afraid to push boundaries. Just keep at it and throw in a couple of similes and metaphors here and there and you'll be unstoppable! Hope this helps a little bit =)

thank you so muccchhh!!! it does help and i promise i will try to apply that to my writing thank you again
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