This is another rap I wrote while waiting for a VERY long download and while waiting for the snow to clear from outside my house, so there's the inspiration for the subject of my rap. As you may have noticed I have switched back to my quite mainstream style which is the one I have chosen to pursue. I have to say that this was one of the faster written raps I have composed, done between midnight and 1 am with some breaks included but reading back over it I feel it flows well enough to post so here it is:
Patience
(Hook)
Take your time and feel the rhyme
Don't rush in and you will be fine
'Cos sometimes within it's hard to define
What's really yours and what's really mine
(Verse 1)
Stand back, Jamie is here
Just have patience don't ever fear
Sit back, relax while drinking the beer
Just wait for all the good's coming near
Here, whether you're 5 or forty
No care 'cos we're gonna haul out shortly
Do*things like mum always taught me
No regrets, they won't haunt me
Be patient there in the waiting
Sit still, no more debating
Hold on for the good's creating
No more backlash and no more of stating
Why, 'cos things working out
But you don't know what we think about
Be there 'cos time's come to haul out
Gone like the wind, no stalling so climb out
(Hook)
Take your time and feel the rhyme
Don't rush in and you will be fine
'Cos sometimes within it's hard to define
What's really yours and what's really mine
(Verse 2)
Jump on, that's what they like
You can't see that they're never right
Lay back and just taking your time
'cos thing's going well and thing's going fine
Rhyme, like I ain't before
Not just a pair 'cos I got a store
Spread it around and spitting galore
What could you want? Can't ask for more
Placing the thought, placing the track
Laying the groundwork, don't turn your back
Think it through or you face the sack
Don't rush in, don't take on a crack
Why? or you face the pain
Then take it backward time and again
Hurting like hell, no right ankle sprain
No more burning, you must detain
(Hook)
Take your time and feel the rhyme
Don't rush in and you will be fine
'Cos sometimes within it's hard to define
What's really yours and what's really mine
(Verse 3)
No need to rush out, jumping the gun
Life can't be easy, ain't always fun
Sometimes you don't have to be done
'cos it's just started, it's just begun
One, 'cos it don't have to be you
Stay in the pack, do think it through
'cos we're in together, we're in it too
keeping our values and keeping it true
Hold back, reign in the horses
'cos you can't surely, preparing for this
Take your time no stalling an' no miss
'cos all you get is balling on all this
Piss, all over the doubt
Give it a good shot, give it a good shout
No matter whatever so just give it out
But just have patience don't miss it out
(Hook)
Take your time and feel the rhyme
Don't rush in and you will be fine
'Cos sometimes within it's hard to define
What's really yours and what's really mine
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New Rap - Patience. Any comments/suggestions?
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Wow dude I really like this.. A lot. The flow is great, in fact it's as great as frosted flakes. The Rhyme scheme is amazing, the hook is short but very sweet and definitely adds to this song. You did a great job man, and people need to quit being *******s and comment on your stuff more.
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Wow, lots of thanks dude
I thought it felt good but not THAT good 
I did read somewhere that like 90% or something Of users of forums like this want their lyrics evaluated and not evaluate anyone else's. Dunno if that's true but it applies to some people so I thought I'd mention it
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This is good you should keep going on with this
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This rap is done but I'm posting another in the same style soon