New Rap - Wait On. What do you all think of this one?

This is my new rap which is in a similar style to my previous one - patience but I think I've touched the flow up a bit more and with a longer hook this time. I'm really liking this style which is very mainstream so I'm gonna keep with it for a while, especially if it gets good evaluations. As always, be critical because I like to know every little thing that's wrong

Wait On

(Hook)
Hold on, just take your time
Things going well and things going fine
To blast off now it would be a crime
Sit there primed and just let it rhyme
Wait on, take time for the get go
Waiting for my call, my say so, my let know
Build up the muscles training to go pro
You know and I know, if time for the get go

(Verse 1)
Break out, don't lose your track
'cos once it's gone you won't get it back
Tighten the knot and tighten the rope
Pull you back so you better hope
No mope, it's coming back
So wait on a while, just sit there on track
We all know that good comes to those
Who chose to pose and wait for the go

Don't take on the Lion, take on the tiger
Take on the weak one, not on the fire
Not on the one, the wonderman higher
Poop on the one, the lower the spire
Rush, crap! Taken aback
'cos you rush in, look over the fact
This is the stuff that get's you the sack
So no fooling off, I'm calling you back

(Hook)
Hold on, just take your time
Things going well and things going fine
To blast off now it would be a crime
Sit there primed and just let it rhyme
Wait on, take time for the get go
Waiting for my call, my say so, my let know
Build up the muscles training to go pro
You know and I know, if time for the get go

(Verse 2)
Wait for the Light and wait for the signal
Don't jump the gun, hold back for the big call
Reign in the horses, reign in the fight
Hold up the marching, keep it in sight
Holding your ground and holding the dream
Taking your time to think up the scheme
Wait for the icing, wait for the cream
This be the topping unto the dream

Build up, power the charger
'cos we all want to go in the harder
You be the small kid, I'll be the father
You play with static, I play with thunder
Under, my whole mighty all power
I'll mash a Titan, one by the hour
No crazy power disrupt my shower
Go blast the power, only get louder

(Hook)
Hold on, just take your time
Things going well and things going fine
To blast off now it would be a crime
Sit there primed and just let it rhyme
Wait on, take time for the get go
Waiting for my call, my say so, my let know
Build up the muscles training to go pro
You know and I know, if time for the get go

(Verse 3)
Open the pathways, go for the win
Just took your time but now you can sing
Preaching for the hope that you bring
Giving that special person the ring
Fall out, come down from the sky
'Cos now you're the top nob flying the high
Breaking the weakest, don't have to try
'cos now all the good things come crashing by

Followed the advice, followed the dream
Time for the icing, time for the cream
Invincible although it would seem
So don't go dirty, go for the clean
I been, on top of the pile
High cash income, top of the style
This is the best thing, top by a mile
Just try your best to stay there a while

(Hook)
Hold on, just take your time
Things going well and things going fine
To blast off now it would be a crime
Sit there primed and just let it rhyme
Wait on, take time for the get go
Waiting for my call, my say so, my let know
Build up the muscles training to go pro
You know and I know if time for the get go

There it is, I hope you liked it what do you think?

Erm its ok not as good as some of the other stuff you've posted. I think more metaphors and using multis and in rhymes will make it sound alot better. Only my opinion though

I agree, it's good but not as good as the other stuff u've posted so far. And it kind of frustrates me because I know you're such a good writer. I remember the first lyric you posted, I loved it.

I agree as well, certainly one of my weaker raps. I forgot this existed, it's from the 27th December, back when I was trying out some new stuff still, no excuses, it's weak. And I remember the first lyric I wrote, it took time but I liked the end result and this is weak on metaphors. The next lyric I shall post has quite a few metaphors in it, and less end rhyming, more in rhyming