First time caller...full time baller here, haha. Anyway, my first attempt at actually writing A rap down. Truth be told I got to this junction when I bought the T-Pain app..lol. I've been
A hip- hop head since it's inception but never wrote verse till now. I used to the T-Pain app to
make a trash talk rap for my fantasy football league and it was a big hit. It was completely wack
But hella fun. So I was asked to make a Birthday song for a friend and she loved it. Again, it was
completely wack but hella fun. So in between all the nonsense and abusing the auto-tune I caught the beat right for a few bars and actually flowed over the track w some decent lyrics and DAMN it felt good!!! So now I'm trying to put together a complete piece...which ain't easy!! The best rappers make it look easy but it surely isn't. Anyway looking for feedback on structure content anything.




My flows so sick you be illin
run and get some penicillin
but no cure for the words I'm spilling
Finish that last will and testament
cuz death is surely imminent
my flow is so divine
your life is on the line
So spare yourself and save the mindless drivel
and lemme pose you a riddle

What uses words you never heard
Is fly as a bird
so sick w spoken word
Rarely has to curse on a verse
If you haven't figured it out by the end of this bar
than your dumber than you look
which is pretty ****in stupid...
That sounded so good I think im gonna loop it....

Yeah, call the coroner
Your flow is boring, huh?
Yeah, I slayed you on the track
There's no coming back
There will be no resurrection
Your life as an MC has has reached an intersection
Your looking at a stop sign
Listen to the flat line

(right here I hit the auto tune hard w my pseudo flatline)