Nightlife - new rap, newish style. What do you think?

Well, this is my new rap "Nightlife" which is inspired through a friends experience rather than mine. It takes the themes from both nightclubs and house parties, much the reason why it wasn't called "night clubs" but "nightlife" to represent all night time activities like this. One change is the style of my writing which is continuously evolving as I get better at writing. One more thing I have tries to do, and will work on more in future raps, is the hook. I use to use it as a 'rest' from the verse but now I realise that what most regular listeners listen to in my field of music is the chorus and it should not be a rest point, but a really catchy, ramped up verse with a good backing track to make people want to tune in for the chorus as the average pop listener listens and sings along to the hook. So here is a new, more happy, higher energy rap and hook, different to previous ones. Hope you like this style

Nightlife

(Verse 1)
Man that nightlife, bright like floodlights
Straight up chat, go hit the chick had
Black dyed red and blond in highlights
Try I might, a shine like skylights
Damn she's good, she's got the good look
Great that face, give me the look took
My love life, got me excited and
Who can't ask for more? ...
Straight up stranger, I ain't laid ya
We got talking, got my pager
Leave you standing, all lights focus
Right on you, got bright light locus
Stray that far, got you to catch I
Got Scott Pilgrim, skills to match I
Know you're golden, lot to lose
And I can't not feel the blues ...

(Hook)
Living the life at peak black night time
Slugging the shots and seat back laughter
Rolling 'em up like a shop store's carpets
Searching the hot stuff life can't tarnish
Partying up since the nightclub started
Wait for the fight to see who starts it
... No stuff could harm it
No words in life could stop my partying
I live life just living in the moment
See this girl, I'd like to go and phone 'em
Bring her home to live in the good times
Having the time of my life in the night time
Glowing in the lights of a lit up dance floor
Do the Macarena tell 'em let us do it once more
Sellers running out of the liquor in the rum store
Showing us all that I'm living in the nightlife

(Verse 2)
Wish I told ya, more than liked ya
Set it free, my head feels lighter
Just all that to set in motion
Freelance love, feel deep emotion
Crazed hands roam your skin all over
Run my head: feeling decoder
Try work out if you really like me
Get it wrong won't take it lightly
Trust this man she'll spite me down
Crush to ground, smashed around
Letting me know if I gave the wrong signal
Crazed in rage I'm on the wrong wavelength
Then I know I'm not to get laid then
Wish I'd chose not to have stayed then
Bad thing is you got to have one thing
That I just can't resist ...

(Hook)
Living the life at peak black night time
Slugging the shots and seat back laughter
Rolling 'em up like a shop store's carpets
Searching the hot stuff life can't tarnish
Partying up since the nightclub started
Wait for the fight to see who starts it
... No stuff could harm it
No words in life could stop my partying
I live life just living in the moment
See this girl, I'd like to go and phone 'em
Bring her home to live in the good times
Having the time of my life in the night time
Glowing in the lights of a lit up dance floor
Do the Macarena tell 'em let us do it once more
Sellers running out of the liquor in the rum store
Showing us all that I'm living in the nightlife

(Verse 3)
Sitting in the toilets, listen to what's happening
Hearing the sounds of the lucky banging, having it
Then see me in my life, forever staggering
Stuffed my chances with the girls, forever stammering
Don't see me, don't think I'm hard enough
Go for the bad boy who don't go far enough
Alexandra Burke the story of the good girl
Just pass me cos I ain't so dangerous
They don't care if the guy so "played on us"
Just take it all so long as he "Lays on us"
Yep, that's her afflicted
Just wants more she's sex addicted
Take it all so unpredictable
Wants it all she's so susceptible
Can't play me i'm no Kinectimal
I won't play the game ...

(Hook)
Living the life at peak black night time
Slugging the shots and seat back laughter
Rolling 'em up like a shop store's carpets
Searching the hot stuff life can't tarnish
Partying up since the nightclub started
Wait for the fight to see who starts it
... No stuff could harm it
No words in life could stop my partying
I live life just living in the moment
See this girl, I'd like to go and phone 'em
Bring her home to live in the good times
Having the time of my life in the night time
Glowing in the lights of a lit up dance floor
Do the Macarena tell 'em let us do it once more
Sellers running out of the liquor in the rum store
Showing us all that I'm living in the nightlife

And for your information, this was written to my beat "solution" on my YouTube channel

Prodigy17195

I like it. Its got a nice flow. The third verse especially was slick. Nice rhymes and use of multi's 2 . Though Im not sure about the hook. When I was reading the hook I was almost reading it as another verse. Since its meant to be the catchiest part of the song a good idea would be to have a 6-8 line hook that repeats itself. That way it'll fit the beat and will stick to the listener 2. Hope it helped bro

Thanks, I'm gonna look into that now I think the idea is to make a hook which the listener would want to rap along to anyway, thanks

How come I didn't read this before ? I'm starting to appreciate the different styles you're bringing, it's really good ! I'm just wondering where you start rappin' ? I'm guessin' at 14 seconds ?

The rapping starts after 16 bars which is at 26-27 seconds. I used a 16 bar intro on this beat at 140 bpm. But yeah, 26-27 seconds is the start

I have no ear for music, really. I can hardly tell when a rap should start or end, that's why I have such a problem 'inventing' an entire song. Sometimes I wonder if I should be rapping at all, but I just love writing too much not to. I checked the beat and the lyric again, tried it at 27 seconds and it flows ! Hahaa Good job

Thanks, and I'd ask you to keep on rapping cos what verses you produce are good. And glad you found the flow