My 1st lyrics here

Ok, so this song I made and dedicated to one of my best friends because he's so unlucky with Love issues (who never had them, uh?) and he's such a cool guy, he should be more lucky, really, so yeah, I wrote this for him..
This were my 1st (and only, so far) lyrics I wrote with my new (and improved, I hope) method/way of writing lyrics, so I hope I did fine .

I thought of them to be played in a Metal music

Hope you like 'em




"Nothing Holds Nothing"


Defy the laws of Love
Like rockets defy the laws of gravity,
As our own anatomy is the only certain thing we have
When not even the sky is a boundary.

Don't posture yourself in reverence, when the world is against you
Because nothing brings you down harder than yourself.
Hear desperation by exhalations of air,
The language of the cowards,
And hear the mocking of the uncaring and unprepared.
Breathe the mix of what the future holds:
A future resting upon rollercoasters of greedy emotions,
Dissocial and self-promotions.
Avoid the end of the world!
Invalidate the PROPHECIES!

We lean at the sight of heroes shedding tears.
What's a war without agony?
What's a war without agony?

We immerse ourselves in fear,
Continuously stabbed by hourglasses
That peel off our fortitude.
When your core has been taken,
What's there to hold your bones?
You'll be merely controlled by nothingness;
A void! A VOID!

Failing is not an option,
You will succeed.
Close friends will tell you that you won
When you can't come upon faith in yourself anymore.
The victory belongs to you,
Your unsuccessfulness is just an illusion.

In a shrunk world, die tall!

When your core has been taken
What's there to hold your bones?
When your core has been taken
What's there to hold your bones?
A void! A VOID!

Wow this is awesome,
Your better than me^^! Lmao!

Write more man, this is beast

Haha, thank you

I really would appreciate more feedback