My first full 16 bars plus a few

in the past month or 2 ive started jotting down rhymes every once in a while but this is the first full 16 bars ive made. tell me what you think, is it at least a good start?

back when I had my subie I had a reason to stay sober
gotta stay clear headed while I rally every corner
heavy on the brakes heavy on the gas
left foot braking so im going the fastest
quick, pick up your glasses
I know we hit a jump and you lost your place
but I need to hear the notes so I can pick up the pace
we flying towards the hairpin commin in hot
but I dont lose my cool I gotta show them what I got
turbo spooled ALS popin like a gun shot
dodging all trees cus they'll stop you like a blood clot
im attackin every turn like im fully commited
poped a tire on a burm but I still cant quit
I shift it, pop the clutch then I drift it
drive so fast cus when do im im feelin lifted
Life is a game and its truly the hardest
as the days go by we slowly make progress
but gettin to the top means givin your all
no givin up in it for the long haul
skill helps you out but dont doubt yourself
its about whats in your chest
you gotta want it more than anyone
if you wanna be the best

It certainly ain't a bad start. I can see you got it in you to write a decent rap. I thought the flow was generally off and on, some bits flowed really well while others didn't at all. I thought the rhyming was ok, but could have been better. Overall, I'd be pleased with that start but trust me, it might be a little while before you start writing stuff you're really proud of. I started in November, it's only now I start to really like some raps I do. The best thing to do now is to keep writing verses and to write to a beat. Writing to a beat I find does wonders for your flow so if you don't already, try it