God, I hate you.

Ayo, this is one of my brand new composition titled "God, I hate you". It's a rap, but for me it's more than just another rap, with money, *****es, and guns, it's all about truth, life and hope.
Hope you like it.

PS: I'm french, so if there is any mistakes with my lyrics please give me some feedbacks, thank you.


No more fairy tales,
the lion is dead tonight,
the all family is pale,
the future seemed so bright,
the quest is a fail,
they may have not seen the light,
their life is a jail,
They were waiting for a knight,
eating their hail,
they talk about sacrifice,
losing their hair,
they realize what is the price,
Who's taking care,
they only need some advices,
they have so many things to share,
but God is playing with dice,
Tell me how they suppose to live without air,
What the **** are you doing with their lives,
They are praying and waiting for glare,
Basically you were resolving the strife,
They are dying slowly and that's unfair,
They just have to self-mutilate with a knife,
A sad end and a poor story to repair,
Little Lion only wants to play in the square,
Little Lion is dreaming about being a millionaire,
Little Lion is growing up, with a black scare,
A black whole of insanity and nightmares,
While mom is dying on her rocking chair.
Little Lion is trying to reach a Devil to dare.

[Chorus-GOSPEL]
Where are you God when we need you ?
Where are you God ? They put me through..
Where were you God when we prayed you ?
Where are you now cause I need you ?
No (nonono) help is coming.
We will pass our future crawling.

Where is the happy end of the story,
Of a guy without ambition, I'm sorry,
We are crawling, our past is to heavy,
We are living in vain, it's a tragedy,
For me, Little Lion is an example,
Not to quote my own example,
But for some people life is not simple,
When life gives you kicks its hard to stay humble,
Truth is hard to see, listen to her mumbles,
You'll probably be screaming "What da hell ?"
Listen to her voice, she could have something to tell,
Drive out all the ghosts stocked in your shell,
Open up your eyes and look at what the future held,
Follow the whispers, far before they dispel,
If you missed them, let her some time to retell,
You'll be brand new, ready to get propelled.
All I know is that God is never there when we want it to,
He's probably smoking a join while we are putting through,
Don't trust him, believe in your own way,
Try to find something that keep you away,
Far away from him, and hope for a better day.

[Chorus-GOSPEL] x3
Where are you God when we need you ?
Where are you God ? They put me through..
Where were you God when we prayed you ?
Where are you now cause I need you ?
No (nonono) help is coming.
We will pass our future crawling.


Copyright 2011-2012 Max Bass, Slim Phoenix.

I'm not a rap expert by any means and i'll admit that I lost the flow of it after the 1st section of lines. But I wanted to say I thought the 1st 16 lines were really well done. The flow and consistent rhyming were awesome and I really liked it. Kudos.

Thank you very much !
Well, I tried to keep the same flow, but it's really hard to write with those adjustments, i've done my best, and I'm continually trying to improve my lyrics to have a real flow without mistakes.
You lost the flow after the first section of lines, because the beat of is "changing" at this time, it's an effect.

Damn thats good. Ppl can relate to this man this is wat american rap lacks the truth. Keep it up

Originally Posted by Lm_Rich

Damn thats good. Ppl can relate to this man this is wat american rap lacks the truth. Keep it up

I agree completely.
I do how ever think it needs more spunk. I't looks more like a long poem but with a little perseverance, It could open the eyes wider.
I too wrote a song about god. it is a question we all ask. why this and why that. And they say it's human nature. We did it to our selves.
The angles hate our guts anyway because god gave us souls. and left the angles as is. There is a war in heaven as we speak. or at least thats what they say.
Good job on the copyright stamp.
and good job so far just put a little more rhyme to it. stack your rhymes more and try not to start it off with (the) too much.


please check out me stuff as well. I say this because to many of my lyrics have not been posted on.

a favor for a favor.

Thanks

Sk'nDeep