The Monster

I just wrote this like 5 minutes ago..tell me what you think!

Everything is vague
A walking dreamland in my mind
I am but a plague
Screaming to be left behind

Before the black covers my body
And the crimson clouds my eyes
Taking over everything
That I hold dear inside

It creeps up like a monster
Breaking through its metal chains
Digs its teeth into my chest
Though there's no heart to gain

I sold it to the underworld
They paid a pretty price
Now I am just a heartless girl
A terror in the night

The monster pulls out his teeth
And the blood begins to pour
But it is not my body
That I hear hit the floor

The monster starts to shake
Frothy sputum fills his lungs
His system couldn't take
Drinking my poisoned blood

So I am but a plague..
Screaming to be left behind
Everything is vague
A walking dreamland in my mind..

Well what I think is this is awesome! For one thing it's a whole novelette in 7 4-line verses, and this is the climax of the plot:

...
But it is not my body
That I hear hit the floor

...
His system couldn't take
Drinking my poisoned blood

So I am but a plague..
Screaming to be left behind

And the imagery borders on spectacular, almost from line to line. I love this!