Battlefield

Ok this was my first attempt at a rap verse based on war
Advice on how to improve would be good

Guns at the ready
Armed to the teeth
Fighting for a tommorow
That they may never see
Lost on the battlefield
Walking on their future grave
The wars a place for memories
And heros names
They fight to protec us
Fight to survive
Then at the end of the day
They take the ultimate dive
Risking their life
So that we can see the sunrise
But for everyday that we wake
Another soldier dies
We're not good people
Living in a world thats ****ed up
We're ****ed up people
And its the only world we got
So we do destroy it
To settle petty rivalry
And why do i see dead bodies
When i switch on the TV

Tell me what you think

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