Whether

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    Katie13 said:

    Red face Whether

    Hold it together,
    It wouldn't be forever,
    And anyway,
    Birds of a feather,
    Flock together,
    But I'm at the end of my tether,
    Worried that not-forever,
    Could be never,
    I know it's not clever,
    To wonder what if or whether,
    As she is to me,
    What lace is to leather,
    This bond I should sever,
    And accept the never,
    But on days when the weather,
    Is cold and the heather,
    On the moors is wet, I'll wonder,
    Whether
    "If you were me, then I'd be you, and if I were you, I'd hide somewhere faraway..."
     
  2. mexico62 said:

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    Hi katie13, first of all, congratulations, because I love poems in rhymes, and this is hard to find nowdays, other thing I noticed, somethimes, when the sounds repeat the same at the end of each line is dificult to make it no repetitive, but I think that you did a great job here, because your poem can be enjoyed and donīt tires the ears, it sounds so good, Thank you for transmit this feelings in our hearts. Go on always.
     
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    Katie13 said:

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    Thanks This idea was a bit of a challenge but I think it kinda worked.
    "If you were me, then I'd be you, and if I were you, I'd hide somewhere faraway..."
     
  4. mexico62 said:

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    Of course it worked very well itīs a explendid job, continue ahead.