Need title~ please read!!!

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  1. Acheramee's Avatar

    Acheramee said:

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    I need a good title, something interesting.
    Complements appreciated. Criticism wanted.
    here goes:



    You take our plans and pull them from our heads
    But we take our secrets into our beds

    What you never know
    Will let you rest in peace
    Better to let us go
    Than make us believe

    We hold you close then pull apart
    Make you proud then break your heart
    It’s what we do
    Be a soldier for the next fight
    And a shoulder for the next night
    We’ll wipe your tears then make them flow
    Leave you dark then let you glow
    It’s what we do

    You take our desires and pull them from our souls
    But we take our dreams to be at home

    What you never know
    Will be your lullaby
    Better to let us go
    Than to say goodbye

    But you were there
    Only several mistakes before us
    Can’t you remember doing the same?

    We hold you close then pull apart
    Make you proud then break your heart
    It’s what we do
    Be a soldier for the next fight
    And a shoulder for the next night
    We’ll wipe your tears then make them flow
    Yet we love you more than you can know
    It’s what we do

    What you never know
    Will be your only light
    Better to let us go
    Than watch us die

    You take our plans and pull them from our heads
    But we take our secrets into our beds…
     
  2. HappyL said:

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    "Unavowed" or "Inward" ... these were the words that suddenly crossed my mind.
     
  3. Maviii's Avatar

    Maviii said:

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    What you never know

    or

    believe
     
  4. Inskeepruler's Avatar

    Inskeepruler said:

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    This reminds me of a parent/child relationship. Idk maybe Amidst Adolescence? Really good work.
    Smilez
     
  5. Acheramee's Avatar

    Acheramee said:

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    Yeah, it was kinda a parent and teenager relationship song. What can I say, Mom's can be great inspirations sometimes....just maybe for the wrong reasons every once in a while. Anyway, thanks for the ideas everyone!
     
  6. SK'nDeep's Avatar

    SK'nDeep said:

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    Parents just don't understand. j/k



    Beautiful song...
    It relates with so many people out there.
    Well expressed great metaphors
    well done....
    .




    unspoken , forbidden, silents

    or if you want, use an oxymoron

    verbally unspoken

    blaring silents or something like that.
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep
     
  7. Katie13's Avatar

    Katie13 said:

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    I really like this. It's got some really great lyrics in there. I agree with What You Never Know for a title.
    "If you were me, then I'd be you, and if I were you, I'd hide somewhere faraway..."