Tell me what ya think of this one??

Dad i been tryin to get over the fact that he left me

Never bothered to meet me deep inside feelin empty

Don’t understand how someone could leave their child

I should of been your number one priority

Understand u wanna party an get a wild

Just don’t get how u can one day up an leave your baby

Want nothing to do with u now don’t care hate me

I been messin up to but havin u their wouldn’t of changed me

Cant even get up for work just like u dad guess were lazy

Think I ever want anything to do with you your crazy

Know your all f***ed up on drugs o right thats your main priority

Why give in now when you never were there like you should be

Think u would of wanted to meet your kid didnt even live far from me

Never have even bothered to call or **** even a text maybe

Your choices an your action have really amazed me

It's better than your earlier stuff.


But 15 bars doesn't really even make a verse.

Thanks... how many bars you usually make?

This sounds like a poem but this is a lil better than your other stuff. Still ****. Just âtd better than ****.

You mean me?

For a verse, I would say 15-20. Chorus, normally I use bits of songs. Bridge? Well, sometimes you put a few bars there, but again, better with a sample. And Nameless? It actually isn't bad.

It isn't bad for a POEM. I wouldn't consider it a rap though.