first rap (might suck a bit xD)

This is probably my first rap, 'though not very good, I must admit, haha :P oh well , I just felt like doing it, lol



Peeps, we're so manic;
In this world there's no sense of tragic.
I rap these words like it's somethin' easy,
Like Governments throwing our money in the garbage:
Sleazy.

This ain't no game
But I feel like it's a trainwreck
And I feel like a martyr.
This ain't a train
And I feel like I'm like a postman,
Giving out news like I'm Wayne, Carter.

What the **** does this **** mean?
I'm feeling Moody and ****ed by all,
I feel like I'm a ****ing voyeur
And I feel like cutting out the ratings like I'm Standard & Poor's,
Of all those old cunts that control our lives,
Control our grandmother's money, yours and mine.

We must react, do an act
Work, protest, riot, attack.

I see deaths every day, I see panic and madness,
I see tears of joy, surpassed by the thousands of tears of sadness.
This isn't right, kids are destroying;
They don't have enough guidance, stop enjoying.
Governaments, man up and stop sucking money,
You'll eventually fall
And realize you're just another brick in the wall.

the words are not the issue.
It's the delivery and placment of your rhymes. Stack your words to rhyme better and and ad more syllables for flow. punch lines and word play is a extra benefit to consider aswell.
The laws are limitless....your the boss of the beat.
think of it as representing your self and how you think about things.


This is what I mean.
For Example....





This ain't no game, But I feel like it's a train wreck.
And I feel like a martyr and I ain't on the train yet.
like a postman, the dogs been let of the chain.
Ain't Giving out news like I'm Carter, Wayne
or is that Wayne, Carter doesn’t matter, What the *uck does this mean?
in between being *ucked by a dream, just take one for the team.
there ain't no justice if you can't afford the lawyer.
It would be nice but I'm stuck on this *ucking fence like Tom Soyer
Mother *uck Huck Fin!! And double up *uck the Government!!
chewing double meant to get this filthy taste out my mouth!
Break..............................
from there you could start rhyming

1 Out of place, face of a clown, shouting doubt.....
Or
2 Pick a race out of crowds


Something like that....


Great attempt by the way. take my advise and you will get better.
You have potential keep your head up.

good luck.