"Your Bed Of Promises Isn't Comfortable."

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    Guilha said:

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    Everybody needs a place, a place to rest their head,
    But not everybody needs a spot to make their bed,
    'Cause some of us are ghosts
    Kissing goodnight the innocent mistakes others make,
    For it'll be just another day
    Before they make you pay.

    Why would you do that to me?
    Why do you need to do it?
    Like a breeze, you come in and steal my flesh,
    Rip my veins and play possess.

    It's not what you do and say to me,
    It's what you do and say to others .
    Don't try to lip-sync your heart,
    'Cause no honest words are coming out of those red borders.

    I tried and failed to make you see
    That I am all the man you need.
    I tried in vain to seek
    A perfect place to set you free.

    Free from the horrors that you've suffered;
    I tried in vain to seek a spot to keep you buffered.
    Buffered from the lies that went through your ears
    And rearrenged your feelings and attachments,
    But I cannot make you see
    That all those guys just want to f*** you.
    They want to f*** you and hurt you,
    Despise you.
    I worry,
    My darling,
    I swear.
    You push me away with every fake promise you make me go through
    And try to bind me an inch closer to you.

    I do not hate you for what you are,
    I hate what you're turning into.
    I do love you for who you are,
    I do not love the path you're heading to.

    You've scarred me hard
    And made me bleed
    With every lie you've stabbed me with.
    I'm filling a pool where I'll swim forever,
    When my soul let's me go to serve my last endeavour.

    An endeavour to be happy, at last.
    Last edited by Guilha; 10-17-2011 at 06:47 AM.
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    Guilha said:

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    really would like some thoughts of this , please
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    Mixalopoulos said:

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    My thoughts.

    This is you now, in a fυcked up relationship.

    I've been there, and it hurts like Hell.

    Your words convey the desperation.

    Forget the pain, and you will be well.
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    Guilha said:

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    yes, this was/is me and I know what to do, don't worry

    just wanted to see what people thought of the poem itself , some constructive feedback, of what could be changed, what's good, etc etc