A few I have started let me know how they are.

I did this ones on life experience so plz comment.

Pain make it stop
Pain that never ends*
Pain you bring here*
What the **** are you!

Make it stop*
Make it stop
Make it stop

The Pain will always remain*
Even though you not here*
The pain you left*
Is the pain that wouldn't *end!

Make it stop
Make it stop
Make it stop

Second one I have started

So many things I wish I said
But now your gone
I knew I should of told you
Everything

So many things I wish I said
So many things I never said
everything is fading away
Fading away*
Away

We all fade away
You fade away*
But I see that your still here*
Still trying *to see if care


Third one


I am the enemy*
What do i do
Where do I go
All I see*
All I see is hate
Hate is all I am
All I'll be
Nothing more to say
Nothing more to see
So what do you do
What do you get
All you get is hate
All that's left of me*
Everything that remains
Yeah!
This is real*
Shut the **** up
You'll never under stand


I started and am going to finish soon but just want to hear your thoughts.
Thanks

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Well I'll give you a pointer on one.


"I am the enemy*
What do i do
Where do I go
All I see*
All I see is hate
Hate is all I am
All I'll be
Nothing more to say
Nothing more to see
So what do you do
What do you get
All you get is hate < leave this line out and work on finishing it without answering your own questions.
All that's left of me*
Everything that remains
Yeah!
This is real*
Shut the **** up
You'll never under stand"

Matt so far I like what you have but I would suggest finishing them first. Then walk away for a day or so then read what you have and adjust them.

Slim