something im working on...feedback

Humanity's dampened my spirit driven to the point of insanity,
over headlike a canopy delirious manicly panicking...
hearing noises invading the silenice... hate crimes and violence.
killed for being of different ethnic...human nature at it's finest...
watching the sun fall behind the horizon ...soon it will be night.
Mulder guided by the moon light.what a beautiful sight...
how could a world this beautiful be so thoughtless and cruel?
what causes the feuds between us? why do opposites duel?
It's obvious we"re not out of the woods yet,lost and confused...
ignoring the writing on the wall when it's talking to you..

Still. Needs work under. Construction... Lol

Copyright 11/3/2011

What work does it need ?
I loved it, especially your last sentence. 'Ignoring the writing on the wall when it's talking to you' Damn !
That's some deep shxt right here !

thanks home girl...I guess I meant not finnished..lol

Yea that's dope **** dawg hah. Clear like blues skies. Keep it goin tho

Originally Posted by smoothtung

Yea that's dope **** dawg hah. Clear like blues skies. Keep it goin tho

thanks smooth your sick and Sadistic song your working on is off the chain as well. I put in a few sugestions for you in your updated version...

Yes Skn!
yes, mate.. that's really empassioned, dynamic and eloquent writing.
thanks for posting, I really enjoyed reading.

only "needs more work" meaning that I need to read (and hear) more of that. wanna know where you take it next.
please continue...

eh I s'pose you're posting it at this stage because you want constructive criticism..
hold up..

straining to find something to criticise..

eh..

damn.

Nope, dunno. sorry.
too dope.

Originally Posted by _SBU

eh I s'pose you're posting it at this stage because you want constructive criticism..
hold up..

straining to find something to criticise..

eh..

damn.

Nope, dunno. sorry.
too dope.

LOL your a trip bro....thanks man...this is why they call me Sk'nDeep.ha ha

ahah.
the first time I called you Sk'ndeep it was only 'coz you'd set it as your username. but now- yes, that also.

word.