sick n sadistic re-aranged so far... (sample)

If i could emerge as the real me, a sick sadistic enemy,
An emcee with dreams of hysterectomies an vasectomies...
Id fester like bees when teased, an carve out knees wit house keys.
Id bleed out sheep ta hear em bleat, while farmers plead "please let em be!!"
No sympathy from me so hear my sinister scream let gleem
a beam of dark greed off the arc'd beams of the barn ceiling.
Mark the scene with caution posts, in the middle..an esophagus exposed.
Lay a straw hat next to the fallen pro, whose sollum woes we'll never know.
Ill step toe o'er toe down the stoned road to the next awaiting stain..
Find a lonely homie at home-he catches me through the window pain
..
Im ceaseless so smash the glass ta pieces, slice and entice a cold grievance.
Stand in peace over a seamless waste of skin that I tore seams in...

This is something way more sick n sadistic hah. Dropped most metaphores an strayed but...

still sick and Sadistic...remember when Steeze told you about the Id,Id, think. well he made a good point. try removing just that after the first one.
and try doing as I said before rhymes your syllables better at the end of each bar. other than that. nice work again Smooth...

not my best but...something like this...not intended to change your song just a sugestion...
you can keep the farmer line in there too how every you like it best..

Id fester like bees when teased, an carve out knees wit house keys.
bleed out sheep ta hear em bleat,sip out their life like fountain drinks...
or
Id fester like bees when teased, an carve out knees wit house keys.
bleed out sheep ta hear em bleat, how could the world be this sick and sadistic with out me.

Good point, Sk'n. Overall it's still a good lyric.