Not Asking

Fingertips are trailing,
Pages I haven't read,
The air is still and silent,
Not a word's been said,

Eyes hang in the nightsky,
And I know they're yours,
The wind, at my revelation,
Whistles its applause,

And somehow I knew,
It'd always been you,

I'm not asking for a miracle,
I don't want to see the light,
All I'm asking is for you to,
Fall in love with me tonight,

Ink dries in the cartridge,
No ticking from the clock,
Bulbs lie in the darkness,
Time's begun to stop,

And somehow I knew,
It can only be you,

I'm not asking for a miracle,
I don't want to see the light,
All I'm asking is for you to,
Fall in love with me tonight,

Didn't see that you were perfect,
Until I'd seen you get away,
And maybe I've lost my chance,
By living in this trance,

I'm not asking for a miracle,
I don't want to see the light,
All I'm asking is for you to,
Fall in love with me tonight,

This blind girl isn't asking,
For someone to heal my sight,
All I'm asking is for you to,
Fall in love with me tonight,

Maybe I've lost my chance,
By living in this trance,
Maybe it was my final dance,
But maybe...

Love this.

Another amazing song from Katie x

Thanks, guys I quite liked how this one turned out.

"" said RobberBaron

I like this. It's been awhile since I have been on ATL, and it's good to know that there are still great writers on here.

I'm just amazed at your ability to mould words together into a work of art.

Fantastic words, and if you check my post history I very rarely leave a comment without any sort of advice on improvements but this really needs no improvement. Great work.

It really paints a picture.

I'm not asking for a miracle,
I don't want to see the light,
All I'm asking is for you to,
Fall in love with me tonight,

That's a really pretty verse.

The only thing I think could use a change (in my opinion) is trance and chance rhyming, especially with the chance, trance and dance all at the end. Maybe something like dream or daze or haze instead of trance?

Didn't see that you were perfect,
Until I'd seen you get away,
And maybe I've lost my chance,
By living in this (dream? daze? haze?),

I feel like that flows better. Same for the end:
Maybe I've lost my chance,
By living in this (dream? daze? haze?),
Maybe it was my final dance,
But maybe...

Dunno, I just personally don't like when 3 lines are rhymed with the same word unless it's a rap song, which I'll go out on a limb, and say this probably isn't I am by no means an expert, just my own opinion. Also, depending one what melody is involved, and the song structure, it might not make sense at all what I said, or maybe it doesn't make any sense to begin with haha. But to sum it up, I think it's very pretty.

Aw, thanks guys Glad you like it!!
In reply to the -ance rhyme oddity, it was kinda meant to be left hanging, as if there was something more to say. But I do understand your thinking