Drowning in air,
My face says it all,
A steel hand on my lungs,
Lose grip and I fall
Heart on my sleeve,
Blood drowns my throat,
A quivering whisper,
My words start to choke
[Pre-Chorus]
Your presence makes love grow,
But I can't keep up
[Chorus]
You leave me breathless,
With no-where to run,
You beat me senseless,
Punch 'til I'm numb
You could make all the good things come around,
But instead you make less, oh you leave me breathless
[Verse]
Face is on fire,
Flames in my eyes,
Reveal secrets and truth,
But also my heart's lies
Love is not tender,
It pricks like thorn,
I can't ever speak it,
The words never form
[Pre-Chorus]
The stars up above,
Are free from love this much
[Chorus]
You leave me breathless,
With no-where to run,
You beat me senseless,
Punch 'til I'm numb
You could make all the good things come around,
But instead you make less, oh you leave me breathless
[Bridge]
Holding your breath only gets you so far,
You run out of air and get back to where you start,
Can't sleep, can't breath, can't think in my mind,
Oh I'm begging won't you give me the kiss of life
[Chorus]
You leave me breathless,
With no-where to run,
You beat me senseless,
Punch 'til I'm numb
You could make all the good things come around,
But instead you make less, oh you leave me
Breathless,
With no-where to run,
You beat me senseless,
Punch 'til I'm numb
You could make all the good things come around,
But instead you make less, oh you leave me breathless
I enjoyed the story telling aspect of this. The focus being only small has given you a wide topic to cover and I certainly feel as though this is an amazing concept! Some of the language confused me, especially "punch", but the main part added to the atmosphere to build it's presence. Structurally there's almost a drafted flow, though almost adhering to a common design that's been used frequently. Not necessarily a negative, but I was aware of it. Overall, I could see listening to this as a possibility (depending on the genre)