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    Looking very good, Moon, Frankie and amaryn The good thing about haikus is the immediacy with which you can paint them. Truly capturing a moment.


    waiting Spring
    lurks behind Christmas
    not yet - soon


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    Not yet - soon
    Chirping birds take flight
    Welcoming

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    Darn, that was quick. Where did it come from???


    Welcoming
    arms around my heart
    home at last

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    In arabic we say the hearts were together In turkish that's kalp kalbi karsiderler I believe

    Damn. I really like that one. I dont think I should ruin it


    Home at last
    Basket of warmth settles
    Nestling love

    I think I should move away from all the sunshine love and hope theme

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    wispy windswept stalks
    tempting blessed sun and moon
    songs sung in silence

    (i like this game)

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tomatomic View Post
    wispy windswept stalks
    tempting blessed sun and moon
    songs sung in silence

    (i like this game)
    You're a few pages late though

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    Welcome to enjoy it, tomatomic And thanks for your contributions. The idea is to pick the last line in the previous haiku, in this case Noor's "nestling love", though everyone is obviously welcome to practice as much as they like to in this thread

    I'll pick up where Noor left... Was the 3-6-3 intentional? Arabic seems to be full of beautiful expressions, the little I know of it... Languages from warm cultures generally have many beautiful expressions


    Nestling love
    flutters past my soul -
    white wagtail

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    white wagtail
    accompanies her step
    sweet swing sound

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    Sweet sing sound
    complete my cacophony
    strike the tone

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    Strike the tone
    All ears hear too well
    Ring, Death Knell


    Whoops! It rhymes. Let's try an alternate:

    - - - - - -

    Strike the tone
    All ears hear it loud
    Ring, Death Knell


    Which do you all prefer?

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    I prefer the 2nd.


    Ring, death knell
    let the new be born
    exciting

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    Thanks for input!


    Exciting
    Flamingos one-legged
    Take flight

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    Take flight
    my imagination:
    deep sea

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    Deep sea
    Silent brilliant colors
    Speak up

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    Dedicated to Doug Denslowe and his new song, "Baby Won't You Please (Come Home)?"


    A new song
    Unbridled excitement
    A new friend


    . . . . .


    New music
    Dances through my being
    Old friend
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    So if i understand the trend i wonder how it changed from 3 syllables to 2
    But i'll catch up so a lengthy explanation probably is not necessary
    I love the new buttons



    old friend
    new song paints rainbow
    on gray
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~

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    We hop as we see fit, supposedly 3-5-3 and 5-7-5 are the 'correct' formats but I really liked the 1-2-1's me and Noor did. Obviously to give the next writer a chance at something different, you need to write an asymmetric poem. I feel like going for 3-5-3'ish now with a 2-5-3...


    on grey
    splashes of cobalt
    heavenly



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    Pure love


    Heavenly
    spilt seams of tender
    joy, bursting

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    It's midnight, and Noor hits the town


    Joy, bursting
    kills desolation
    serenely

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    okies

    serenely
    on gossamer wings
    escape the sun



    i'm out for now, i'm in the middle of fixing dinner
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~

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