Haiku

It's more about knowing stuff, not intelligence... "I am that" is a (good) book, discussions with Sri Nisargadatta Maharaj. Can't say I get all of it, but it's definitely worth a read. It's also one possible translation of the name YHWH (Yahweh) gives for himself when Moses asks him who he is, "אֶהְיֶה אֲשֶׁר אֶהְיֶה, ʾehyeh ʾašer ʾehyeh".

I scared people away? Come on, they're just busy with all this Yule stuff.

Good first two lines, not a huge fan of the third.

darkness falls
in the sea of light -
my abode

Too cliche?
Fine fine keep your pants on, I scared them.

My abode
Lasting haven upon
rocky shore

Let's say the third line did not deliver on the sweet promises of the second. I said it's Yule who scared them away, all right?

rocky shore
cliffs of rage now rest
while we smile

Sorry ill work on it

While we smile
Glittering diamonds
scintillating

scintillating [4]
ocean-kings and ocean-queens [7]
ride to meet the shore [5]

5-7-5 Haiku . . .

Ride to meet the shore
Emerald queens of the sea
Lay pearl eggs in sand

Love that last line, Frankie. A real pearl!

lay pearl eggs in sand
lay, my love, and let them grow
days of joy shall hatch

Thanks so much, OI!!
5-7-5 haiku . . .

Days of joy shall hatch
Dappled by sun and blossoms
Soft, feathered bundles

soft, feathered bundles
leap from cliffs with faith in flight
life - a leap of faith

5-7-5 haiku

Life - a leap of faith
Tadpoles change, emerge from pond
New locomotion

OI, I think I'm getting a better feel for haiku. Is it discernible to you, or not? Truth and consequences (that is, you say truth; I accept consequences!)

Yes, they certainly roll off your keyboard with greater ease. More flexibility, more openness, more experimenting with less Western ways to express yourself. Your syllable count is, as always, immaculate.

new locomotion
feet sprouting under my heart
carrying me to you

Awwwww, I really like your last one.
(Also, thank you! I want to learn this art of haiku; it will make me learn effective words.)

Carrying me to you
Winds of winter howl and lift
Land soft in your arms

This format is so beautiful because we keep inspiring each other. I doubt I would've written my 'best' (the ones I like the most) haikus without this thread. So thank you (and Noor, and everyone else) I think your last one is your best to date, or at least the one I like the best.

land soft in your arms
future generations will
love them, Mother Earth

5-7-5 haiku

Love them, Mother Earth
Cradle life warm in your womb
Give birth without pain

Originally Posted by OrchestraInside

This format is so beautiful because we keep inspiring each other. I doubt I would've written my 'best' (the ones I like the most) haikus without this thread. So thank you (and Noor, and everyone else) I think your last one is your best to date, or at least the one I like the best.

I was so excited to respond to your haiku, that I failed to read your comment. Thank you so much for your encouragement. I do think using the more traditional 5-7-5 format helps; and I agree that we all are indeed helping each other. And tonight I feel much inspiration, playing off each others' haiku/senryu. I am so glad you set the thread on fire with this game!

give birth without pain
dawn of darkness swept aside
slumber in her lap

5-7-5 haiku

Slumber in her lap
White lilies of the water
Cast shadows below

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Have to say, I rather like this one!

cast shadows below
mellow moonlight amongst stars
caress homeless souls





@Frankie #252-258 : such a sweet challenge!
@Noor and O.I: I like this game too. Indeed, it sharpens the mind- and the tongue

Caress homeless souls
White Lady of the Forest
Find for them a nest

A good, short read for all of us:

http://www.webexhibits.org/poetry/ex..._examples.html