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    Whoops! Our haiku overlapped. What to do now?
    Whoever posts first, wins

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    Quote Originally Posted by OrchestraInside View Post
    There is a myriad of possibilities... 'Overcome me, dark', 'Darkness upon us' - remember, often you don't need to use a verb at all, which is rather particular for haikus, and opens up many possibilities.
    Oooooo! I love, 'Overcome me, dark'!! That's "me." Thank you very much. I also need to practice thinking outside the box.

    I will remember that verbs are not necessary in haiku. Now I'll be practicing on both of these points. Thank you for the advice.

    The senryu would then read:

    Whispers in the light
    Signal intimate moves when
    Overcome me, dark

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    Quote Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine View Post
    Wow! Beautiful, Noor!
    I can never get enough compliments Thank you dear

    Sorry, I saw Ola's one first so carried it on - I also didnt like my first poem so spent a while editing the second line

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    I'm going to go crazy with alliteration on this one

    wispy windswept stalks
    sway in silent rhapsody
    represent the meek

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    Race against time now that we're three It's all yours Frankie

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    Represent the meek
    Who cry out not for pity
    With enduring strength

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    With enduring strength
    howl the hurricanes in us
    deep inside

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    Deep inside
    shadows flickering
    gnarled trunks


    Urgh I'm going to start spelling centre all wrong because of this forum

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    If you go advanced, no need to spell it at all. Too many clicks for your taste?
    I'm feeling short tonight.


    Gnarled trunks
    by the shore
    wild

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    I'm as lazy as they come. I love short.


    Wild
    Your eyes
    Gone

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    Gone.
    Was it
    ever?

    (Feel free to drop the question mark!)

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    Does punctuation carry on?


    Ever?
    She felt
    hope

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    Let's agree to drop punctuation if we want to.


    hope
    smiled
    alone


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    Alone,
    silver
    listens

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    What I really wanted to say was about a silent silver sphere hanging in orbit seeing and hearing everything, a quiet observer, but the syllable count just ever so slightly impeded me.

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    Don't let it; you could have said


    alone
    silver sphere
    listens

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    listens
    hearing not
    a thing

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    A thing
    of such might:
    Your smile

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    your smile
    with me
    now

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    Your smile
    Caresses soul, fondles heart
    Every time


    Too slow again . . .

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