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  1. Inskeepruler's Avatar

    Inskeepruler said:

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    The darkness leaves, the light embraces me
    It's hard to see, its piercing entity
    It fills my soul with hope
    To deal with the fear I cope
    Envious as the light, it fades away

    Some other place, another time
    Familiar face, remembered smile
    It brings back times of old
    And all the stories we have told
    Envious as your face, it fades away

    And as the end grows nearer
    The faded face in the mirror
    Shows contour lines of joy and pain
    The pleading eyes grow clearer
    And warn the past of the future
    And promises clear skies after rain
    Smilez
     
  2. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

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    I humbly submit the title: "At The Edge of the Moon," or "On The Edge of the Moon."

    Were you serious in asking for a title? If so, I'll come back with some other options. FJ
     
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    Frankie Jasmine said:

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    Other takes: "On the Rim of the Moon," "Moon's Rim," or "Moon Ride," something like that. I think, of course of the distinct "sides" of the moon--one in darkness always, the other in light always . . . and how the transition from the dark to the light would be . . . That is the symbolism I see as I read your heartfelt words.
     
  4. strwbrry said:

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    Don't have a title, but I do have an honest opinion: I like your poem. I felt it.