Butterfly Summer

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  1. MoonRide*r*'s Avatar

    MoonRide*r* said:

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    I did not write this.
    I'm just posting it for a friend
    who's too shy or unassuming to know how great this is. IMHO.
    The title is the only thing that's mine, taken from one of the poem's lines.


    Butterfly Summer

    Head spinning, cold heart sinking,
    tripping on shadows among the unliving,
    cursing the fear of what I could not hear,
    the sound of you, so distant...so near

    Desperation my sole motivation,
    painless death a final salvation
    Screaming silent into night so black,
    not even echoes could find their way back.

    Rise up or die on shattered dreams,
    what other choices were there to redeem?
    On someone's prayer I reached the wall,
    straining to hear your own anguished call...

    A thousand yesterdays, forever ago,
    butterfly summers replaced winter's snow
    I was waiting for you the day you came,
    waiting to hear you whisper my name.

    Knowing I've walked the last lonely mile,
    what is the price for every new smile,
    every warm tear that caresses my cheek,
    each touch of your hand that still leaves me weak?

    Don't count it as cost that I can never repay,
    Allow my heart to find to its own way.
    Just let me be the one that you need...
    The last love story you'll ever read.
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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    Anyone: If you have any thoughts about who the author might be, please feel free to guess out loud
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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    I don't know who wrote it,but sub-polar cool is what I call it!You know,this sings so well,it could easily be a song.The "rise up or die" verse could be the chorus.Anyhow,real cool,sub-polar cool!
     
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    Moonride*r* are you gonna tell us or leave us hanging?I'm dying to know WHO wrote this poem!
     
  5. mexico62 said:

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    Hi MoonRide*r*, Of course this is one of my favorites poems, the classical one, using the metrics, rhymes, rhythm, and of course the words are wisely used, every single line couldnīt be changed to be better, as it is, is perfect.
    The main theme, the everlasting love is so touching in the heart. I fear to try to guess who wrote this jewel, so I rather say Thanks to you and Tesha for sharing it with us, itīs a delight to read it over and over.
    Last edited by mexico62; 07-30-2012 at 08:06 PM.
     
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    I think Moon is the one that's being "shy" now so I suppose its up to me
    Yesterday, Sunday 7/29 was 15 months from the day that he and i first met online. After i managed to write that song lyric "In your eyes" i felt a little more confident and most especially i realized that if one has a little bit of language skill, then you can write a couple of rhymes if you just want to do it strongly enough. I wanted to write something special and meaningful for exactly the right man who came into my life at exactly the right time in exactly the right way, not as a man after a woman but as one tender soul to another. I wrote this poem for Moon. I wish that i could write a thousand more. I love you baby. <33

    Thank you all so much for your nice comments
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    and Moon thank you for the title, that sounds just right to me ~♥♥~
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    Teshka,Moon is one Lucky guy!If you can write like this,you can Love like this.You know what I'm trying to say.Good work,and thank you for sharing this with the rest of the world!
     
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    Finally! <33

    mexico62, yeah everything you wrote, the sheer perfection of it; that's exactly why I wanted to post it in this poetry section. It was just too good, I had to show it off
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
    :
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    ROCK 'n' Roll Halls of Fame
     
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    Thanks Doug... yeah "lucky", don't I know it!
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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    Rockers Unite! =>
    ROCK 'n' Roll Halls of Fame
     
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    @Doug, well one other thing is that he's got a really nice car with a rocker-monster sound system!

    @Moon just as sweet as ever, the lyrics of that song are soooo perfect <3<3<3
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
  13. Zakynthos said:

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    It's needless to say that this poem is wonderful. Very lyrical, very musical, very strong rhymes.
     
  14. mexico62 said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by MoonRide*r* View Post
    Finally! <33

    mexico62, yeah everything you wrote, the sheer perfection of it; that's exactly why I wanted to post it in this poetry section. It was just too good, I had to show it off
    And you did a very good thing, No one hides the light, and this is so bright. Thank you for posting it.
     
  15. mexico62 said:

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    Hi Tesha, this is a beautiful work, so please donīt ever think that you canīt, you are a great artist, so continue your art creation. Thanks
     
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    dark1979 said:

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    I was waiting for
    you the day you
    came,
    waiting to hear
    you whisper my
    name. ‎كنت أنتظر...من أجلك اليوم الذي أأتيت فيه،أنتظر...أن أسمعك تهمس أسمي!! ‏
     
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    dark1979 said:

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    Thank you so much MoonRide*r*, for sharing it, so beautiful and so warm feelings....
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Thanks! but no not me it's all about my girl Tess, the one who can not only write but also live and breathe all of those beautiful warm feelings <33
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
    :
    Rockers Unite! =>
    ROCK 'n' Roll Halls of Fame
     
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    Teshka said:

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    look who's talking <33
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    Teshka said:

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    Zakynthos, mexico62 and dark1979 i overlooked saying thank you!! first for reading and also first-and-last for your nice comments!
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~