Will You Remember

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    Johnb31 said:

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    Will you realize?
    Oh how you can't deny
    The pain inside hears you calling
    And recognize
    The world outside
    And the ones who die
    Cause your living
    Do you understand?
    That there is something more than this
    More than broken dreams
    And desperation
    And life of total aberration
    Will you find your self
    Amongst the ruble
    Or die
    And leave it all behind
    "Chorus"
    Will you remember?
    The world you cast behind
    Or will you forget
    And leave it all behind
    Will you remember?
    That day in your life
    When your world came crashing down
    And you were left unbound
    You were left unbound
    "
    When you hear the whispers
    Echo through your mind
    Remember that they
    Cannot dictate your life
    They are but anarchy
    In societies reich
    Fumbling their words
    To make you fight
    “Chorus”
    Will you remember?
    The world you cast behind
    Or will you forget
    And leave it all behind
    Will you remember?
    That day in your life
    When your world came crashing down
    And you were left unbound
    Will you remember?
    Will you remember?
    Will you find the truth inside?
    And realize that you’re alive
    'Bridge"
    Will you remember?
    Will you remember?
    Will you remember?
    The pain inside
    The way you felt that night
    There’s nowhere you can hide
    You’re here for life
    Will you remember?
    Will you remember?
    The world you cast behind
    Or will you forget
    And leave it all behind
    “Outro”
    Do you understand me?
    When I say the reasons why
    Why I'm here
    Here for life
    Your days are numbered
    So let them shine
    Allow the pain to subside
    And live for a better life
    A better life
    Last edited by Johnb31; 09-19-2013 at 04:11 PM.
     
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    Will you remember a tragedy in your life and learn from it? Or will you leave it all behind only waiting for it to return?
     
  3. moonlight89 said:

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    actually I'm allergic to tragedies just kiddin...
    these lyrics remind me of a song by an Irish band
    our english teacher got us listenin to tht and I was in love with him those times hehe

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3hRCHEMdzmA
    Al Aleb Ghaleb
     
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    I like that song moonlight89
     
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    Teshka said:

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    I just wanna say that i enjoy reading the many things that you post here, i don't necessarily comment very often and tbh if something that i read leaves no impression on me at all then i just move on, but if i leave a "Like" then please be sure that's exactly what i mean.

    But i wanted to comment on this bcs yea i know too much about tragedy and too much about how it can change everything in someone's life, at first in the very worst ways but then we should hope to realize that tragedy must become a lesson on how to move on, and especially to appreciate and care for something good when it comes along...and it will come but we have to be able to see it or hear it above all the noise that may be going on inside....lol i'm getting carried away. Here for life, i have to say that i think that's the best line....and so maybe it would be good to end on that note as well? as an outro...it's just a thought
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    Wow I love your philosophy and the way you look a life. Exactly what I'm trying to convey, and yeah I like your idea for the outro I've always felt this song was incomplete, and can always use work. Thank you for your amazing comments I really enjoy them.
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Teshka said it all.Great lyrics,once again.These I'll remember.
     
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    Johnb31 said:

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    Hey Teshka which Here for life line were you talking about the one in the 2nd verse or in the last.
     
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    Johnb31 said:

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    Hey guys I changed some things and added a new 2nd verse hope u like.
     
  10. moonlight89 said:

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    promising sentences thumbs up!
    Al Aleb Ghaleb
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    I love the repitition of Will you remember,Will you remember,Will you remember.Very........memorable!
     
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    Johnb31 said:

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    I love this....

    When you hear the whispers
    Echo through your mind
    Remember that they
    Cannot dictate your life
    They are but anarchy
    In societies Reich
    Fumbling their words
    To make you fight
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    I hope you love it,you wrote it!You write lots of great lines!
     
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    Johnb31 said:

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    I don't love everything i write lol
     
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    smoothtung said:

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    Great stuff here John honestly. All verses are superb but I especially enjoyed your chorus and the outro. Strong stuff.
    I have one thing to offer and i'll bounce it off of you like I did Doug, it's very simple and you may feel differently which is completely fine.
    but here goes;

    Maybe just take out the word "oh" in the begining of the second line? In MY head it strengthens the first verse evening out the sylobal count between the first and second lines in cadence with the third, fourth, and fifth lines. So maybe it reads like this..

    "Will you realize?
    how you can't deny
    The pain inside hears you calling
    And recognize
    The world outside"

    Either way, great job John..yet again
     
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    smoothtung said:

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    Oh and great response Frankie, very valuable post
     
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    Johnb31 said:

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    hey smoothtung I understand what you're saying about the "oh". Like when I sing it "oh" and "how" are like one word so its like ohhow real quick so its more of a added effect in my voice. So what I'm saying is that it matches my voice and the flow I use when singing. Also i hold out realize for three syllables so I would say re-a-lize. so throughout the song words are made to fit the flow of the song by adding syllables and stretching the words out.
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Smooth makes a good point;it reads better.But,John makes an even better point;it sings better with the "oh".When I first read smooth's Comment,I was on his side.After reading your reply,I'm on yours!Both made great points!
     
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    Teshka said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Johnb31 View Post
    Hey Teshka which Here for life line were you talking about the one in the 2nd verse or in the last.
    I should have said that that's the best part of your lyrics and i think a good finish....just in my own personal perspective, these particular lines are how it feels to me and why i would want to be left with the thought of being "here for life"....bcs this happened to me and tbh this is more meaningful for me than i can explain...

    That day in your life
    When your world came crashing down....
    When you hear the whispers
    Echo through your mind...
    Will you remember?
    Will you find the truth inside?
    And realize that you’re alive....
    Will you remember?
    The pain inside
    The way you felt that night
    There’s nowhere you can hide
    You’re here for life
    Will you remember?
    Will you remember?......
    Do you understand me?
    When I say the reasons why
    Why I'm here
    Here for life
    Your days are numbered
    So let them shine
    Allow the pain to subside
    And live for a better life
    A better life


    And i think that you made the new ending just perfect!! I really love this.
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    Johnb31 said:

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    Thank you and I'm really glad that this song related to something in your life. Helping to relate to people through my music is a mission of mine and I am very thankful that you found that in this song and I hope that more people will.