broken heart song, please review thanks :(

someone must be to blame
but i can only lay
this at my door

another time another place
and it could be so differrent
but you know im sure

that its not you its me
and i will always be
who i want and i know

just cus the air that i breathe
is different dont mean
that i could be yours

bridge
it just seems to me
that this is a bad dream
one thats full of pain
you say its just a game, well

i dont wanna play anymore
my heart is on the floor
broken but still beating

lately life is such a chore
what was once love is now war
however fleeting

For me, it's hard to review something like this, because it's pretty heavy stuff. But I will say this, I sense sincerity. Like this line a lot:
"what was once love is now war
however fleeting"

After rereading this,I found the rhyme,I seek in good song lyrics!What's the rhythm of this?this is very original,and gets better every time I read it.Better than good,somewhere between great and unusual.

hi Doug, thanks for the review, the guitar is similar to where is my mind by the pixies. I will get a recording of it and post soon!