you

hey i don't know what to call this one, please help me with a title if your willing

hear the rain come crashing down, fall asleep ,to the sound
hear the thunders voice booming, like both of yours ,are doing
hear the wind roaring, and my pulse, it is soaring
and know that when it ends it is all because of you.

you
you
you
you

you, your lazy, a failure, uncarring, unable, to see me for what i am
i look to your eyes, and know that, you see me for what i am not
you smoked, you drank, you yelled, you swore, you acted like a ****ing wh***!
one day ill close this door

and, i know, i know, that this is just a time for me.
and, i know, i know, that ill be fine, youll see
and, i know, i know, that i am just a seed
but, i know, i know, my, heart, still, bleeds!

these voices, they echo and ring, and these words i do sing
a song of sadness ,and anger, my life you endanger

you, never hugged, never made me feel loved
never said my name, cause to you i was just, boy
never, said my name, never watched my games, you think youve changed
but ,to me your still the same.

and, i know, i know, that this is just a time for me.
and, i know, i know, that ill be fine, youll see
and, i know, i know, that i am just a seed
but, i know, i know, my, heart, still, bleeds!

ill look at you, with dry eyes, after all is said and done
and ill do what you could not, and see what is , and not for ,what is not

you, your lonley, your sad, you hate your own dad,
your mother has died, your family has left you, alone and to die
you may have cheated, you may have lied, but i can still see, the inside

hear the rain come crashing down, lay awake ,to the sound
hear the thunders voice booming, like my heart, it is doing
hear the wind roaring, and my eyes, they are moarning
and know that when it ends it is all because
(pause)
i forgive you

First vote:You.Second Vote:Hear the Rain

Another great song. I urge u to write as often as you can but don't ever force words let them flow from you let the words write them selves if you continue to write you will be unbelievable in just a few years.

Philip: It is difficult for me to pull myself together to first answer your question.

My vote for title is: THUNDERS

I feel with your words ... you are breaking my heart. And really, isn't that sometimes what we want from a song?? To make us FEEL something, even if it is painful? I have SO much to say that I dare not. I comprehend your feelings, your experiences that should not have been, your lack of experiences that should have been. And I am so very relieved that when the thunder finally stops you can say and mean, "I forgive you." Your ability to forgive unleashes this wonderful creativity you have. Another wonderful song.

i was rereading this song, and i realized that i no longer feel the same pain i did before, i still feel pain about this topic but not as much. is this something that commonly happens when people write about something that hurts/hurt them greatly?

So,Phil,did you pick a title?

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

So,Phil,did you pick a title?

ya i decided on the one that you brought up "you" it fit the song really well thx

Good choice,if I do say so myself!But,how did you change the Thread name?

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Good choice,if I do say so myself!But,how did you change the Thread name?

i changed the thread name by clicking edit and then "go advanced" i think

Thanks,Phil!Now go to bed!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Thanks,Phil!Now go to bed!

awww, do i have to ? jkjk
and goodnight

Originally Posted by Philip Wrobel

i was rereading this song, and i realized that i no longer feel the same pain i did before, i still feel pain about this topic but not as much. is this something that commonly happens when people write about something that hurts/hurt them greatly?

Dear Phil: I missed this post somehow. YES! YES! YES! That is why I began writing poetry as a young teenager and continued off and on throughout my life. It was such a wonderful pain releaser/feelings reliever!! And there are no drawbacks to it!! And no withdrawals!! If I couldn't have written, I don't know what I would have done as an adolescent. [Hmmmmmm . . . maybe become a cutter; but by NO MEANS do I recommend that to anyone because it IS ADDICTIVE and has many drawbacks.] WRITE INSTEAD!!!

I'm glad you got this kind of relief/release. You understand--no matter anyone's nationality, sex, age, pros, cons, whatever, when you connect about the same thing (in this case "writing songs/poetry is a release") it makes a person feel not so alone (I speak of myself). Reading your post, I could identify with you, and it made me feel better too!

genius