sins of my past

this was written a while a go now but hope you enjoy it and how to improve it will be really help full
this is about changing who you are to fit in and not to be treated differently but then realizing you don't like who you have become

ive made mistakes
but that's not my whole
every moment i wake
i try to redeem my soul

i was a nice shy guy
but that was destroyed
if they had only let me by
but now its me they all avoid

these where my darkest days
but i knew they could never last
these are my old ways
these are the sins of my past

they made me the rebellion
so i made life hard
but it wasn't my mission
i just had to keep up my guard

i ended feeling all alone
somewhere i never wanted to end
to my family i was disowned
and i was far from on the mend

these where my darkest days
but i knew they could never last
these are my old ways
these are the sins of my past

but now i have changed to my old ways
and all my friends stayed true
i feel like the old me
and a lot less like you

i repent my sins
and ive paid my dues
now its my game to win
and all others to lose

these where my darkest days
but i knew they could never last
these are my old ways
these are the sins of my past

back to my former glory
and im stronger then what i was
this was my messed up story
and those where my floors

ive found i have more heart and soul
ive learned true intellect
so as i walked away from my past, i found
true perfection is imperfect

This is a FANTASTIC song. Very few people exist that have not at least tried this tactic some time in their lives (young or older). And those who are wise and true (whether young or old), have come to regret their error; correct it; and feel even more alive in their own skin! It is the human condition--wanting to fit in. It is destructive if done against one's true self, as you so poignantly express in your song (which is also a beautiful poem). . . . I will re-read later and get back to you if I find a "hiding" rough spot in the poem. But you should be so very proud of this one!

thank you very much, yes i agree the human condition to be a part of something then being unique is one which all have done, its the feeling of belonging that drives us to do it but could also drive us from our individuality. Thank you for the kind words about my work