Heart beat melody

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  1. trueperfectionisimperfect said:

    Default Heart beat melody

    Not my best work but owell enjoy

    I feel so out of place*
    People rushing by
    Look at me with disgrace *
    Don't see why I try

    I'm not one to make a scene*
    Or to say how I feel
    I don't want to be mean
    I just want to be left to heal*

    I push my heart into the ground*
    But still it beats no sound*
    The world still spins uncontrollably*
    With out my heart beats melody

    There is a gap in the earth
    And I seem to slip though
    I *control my own worth
    It's not up to you*

    I'm an expression less face*
    In a sea full of smiles
    Do I belong in this place
    I'm not on your files

    I push my heart into the ground*
    But still it beats no sound*
    The world still spins uncontrollably*
    With out my heart beats melody

    The point of my existence
    Seems to elude even me
    I seem to have a resistance
    To my own destiny*

    Why am I here*
    Who am I to be
    Who is the puppeteer
    Who is controlling me*

    I push my heart into the ground*
    But still it beats no sound*
    The world still spins uncontrollably*
    With out my heart beats melody
     
  2. DeShaun said:

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    I very much like these lyrics. The message seems complete and unreserved--a despondent narrator seems to be drowning in meaninglessness. Should he subvert his heart into the ground, i.e. drive it further from his body? Wouldn't this undesirably dilute the heart's signal strength, assuming the heart to be a better conduit than the rational mind between man and his attainment of grand meaning? Anyway, I very much appreciate the meter, too. Overall, the piece sounds very cleanly organized but not mechanical--near perfect actually.
     
  3. trueperfectionisimperfect said:

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    Thanks jim maybe one i will
    And deshaun you have perfectly understood this song and what i was trying to say i really appreciate the comment and glad you enjoyed it so much
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Good rhymes,I'll have to get back to this,it's a little deep for me.