Fly Away

I can't take the pain anymore
I can't take the shame like before
Cause I am wasting away
Your voices cause me to decay
And I can do nothing
But slip away
Chorus"
Let me go
Let me live
Let me fly away
Let me go
Let me live
Let me fly away
Into a better place

Mother, father
Your holding on to me
Too tight, I can't breath
Just let me go away
So I can discover
What is truly me
Chorus"
Let me go
Let me live
Let me fly away
Let me go
Let me live
Let me fly away
Into a better place
"Bridge"
I'm sorry for this
But I must go away
So I can find my way
Through these shrouds
Of uncertainty
Please let go of me!!!......
Chorus"
Let me go
Let me live
Let me fly away
Let me go
Let me live
Let me fly away
Into a better place
Let me go.....
Let me go.....
Let me fly away......

Another "happy"song from John!When you rhyme,I'll give you time.Good lyric,yet again!

Haha "happy". I wrote this one and identity loss about an hour ago so its fresh.

Message is clear, lines are to the point, simple rhyme scheme. I like it, a lot actually.

A lot of emotion yells out of those lyrics, emotion with a reasonable basis behind it. Sometimes the first roads to self-discovery are through the articulated words . . . The actions and experience will follow in the natural course of things. The words have to be said and acknowledged by oneself first, before prominent "others" in our lives can hear them clearly. Good job.

John, my man, I think you and I have a lot in common in our songwriting. We both seem to want to break out of our shell and lay our emotions on paper (or in my case, Microsoft Word, lol) in an intense, passionate manner. I could be wrong, but it sounds like this isn't just a song for you. It may be fresh, but it definitely burns inside you still. I would say never let go of that man. I know they say dwelling on things is bad, but not if you let it shape who you are and who you will become. Good song, great expression and even better job expressing it. Looking forward to more!

Thank you so much man I appreciate your comment very much, and I hope that it builds me to an even stronger person. Also check out my songs on my thread on my page there is a bunch that are buried in the forum that would love to would love to resurrected lol. Thanks again.

i really love your chorus, and i have a question: how long after do you say the "into a better place" part?

It's like away held out like two or three syllables and then that part which is "intooo a.better place" it's held out and then fades. I will probaly change the writing of it to make that easier to hear but I usually don't because if it becomes a song with music I might decide to change the way I sing it or Change the song entirely. So I usually stay pretty basic with my line structure.

Nice job!

The call of the wild... not the most elegant way to put it, but I think it fits in the grand scheme of inevitability; maybe even multiple times in a person's life. Like, after I did 20 in the military, man I was so ready to move on and find some other place to be.

This is very identifiable, and it's right to the point and right on target with the subject.

Originally Posted by Johnb31

... because if it becomes a song with music I might decide to change the way I sing it or Change the song entirely. So I usually stay pretty basic with my line structure.

Yeah, when I first tried my hand at serious song-writing, I realized it was impossible to get a lyric "just perfect" before it was worked out with music. Just another necessary step in the creative process.

The emotion is just too much. The sense of being trapped and wanting to escape is a beautiful but tragic thing.

Very eloquent my dear