Just A Moment

(It's amazing how a good old-fashioned migraine or two can make the creative juices rage.)


I wake up from a daydream,
A moment's revery,
And think I must be dreaming still,
The beauty that I see;
No artificial coloring,
No fancy-dancy 'do,
Just loveliness unfettered,
The radiance of you.

It's born beneath the surface
Where your natural beauty sleeps,
And no amount of makeup
Can improve what nature keeps.
The sun sets on your cheeks
And it rises in your eyes;
I wonder what I've ever done
To warrant such a prize.

Perfection is the only word
That captures what I see,
But even that says not enough
Of what you do to me...
I swim inside an ocean
Of incredibilitude,
Waking to the living dream
Of a moment next to you.

I love this!
Pleeeease tell me people that it's at least "ok"

*Shameless Bump*

Originally Posted by MoonRide*r*

I love this!
Pleeeease tell me people that it's at least "ok"

*Shameless Bump*

You love it,how nice.

Thank you John and ofc i love it! <33

We all love it!!!!shameless bump,again

I'm sorry Doug if i may have came across wrong right after your post, i was in a very bad mood bcs of someone on this site that doesn't know or care how to be careful or considerate in what he says, and i think that if Moon had been within reach of that guy, after i said something and then that guy responded, well i'm sure you can guess where that was going but then Moon was a wonder of self-composure, for my sake and our sake so that we could step away from it and enjoy a quiet and very pleasant weekend together

My dearest John when it comes to taking care of a woman's heart you could give lessons to almost any man....you always find the sweetest ways at just the right time to amaze me all over again, especially being so open and so expressive in your feelings, and i know full well that i'm the luckiest woman in the world

I love you baby <33

Come across wrong......Never!I love you guys,I was having a little fun with you,and I know you wouldn't take it wrong!I love a little self promotion and "shameless bumps"!You both are great writers and I'm your #1 fan!I love to mess with you,I know you'll take it in the way it was meant!

Moon, I am jealous in several ways. I want a love song like this to be written by my guy for me (will never happen). I want to be as beautiful as Tess. I want the sun to set on my cheeks and rise in my eyes.

To me this is not corny at all. It is very romantic. I take it very seriously. And I find it beautiful.

Thank you!!! One and all

Frankie, honestly, I woulda never gotten any good at writing poetry (etc) if it hadn't been for all the practice I got from writing dark angry stuff way-back-when. 2-3 years ago I couldn't write jack, coz I don't have natural talent like you have (evidenced by all the great stuff you wrote when you were young), or Tess (who just recently discovered herself), or Doug, Jim, RobberBaron, Katie, and many others I could name. For me it only came with practice, practice, practice and hard work over a long period. What I'm saying is that maybe-just-maybe your guy could write some good stuff too, if he ever chose to start trying

Thank you, Moon. My husband's poetry to me is being here, being loyal, being helpful and hard-working, caring for me when I'm not well. Making me laugh. Taking me out when I really don't feel like it, yet I am grateful later. Thank you so much for your words. I have decided, my husband IS a living poem, inscribed on the inward-sides of my heart . . . and he's much more. I'd not trade that for anything in this world . . .

And I know YOU KNOW what I mean.

Yep.
See the comment I just left on your poems-prose page

There are some common- yet private- feelings wrapped up in beautiful lines

My favourites:

"just loveliness unfettered, the radiance of you"

"...beneath the surface where your natural beauty sleeps"

"the sun sets on your cheeks and it rises in your eyes"


WOW,Moon Great job! a migraine needed for creativity? let's hope NOT,lol

Hi friends, in our life we have good times and bad times, and we go writing about what we live. That is why this poems are so valuables. To be in love is the perfect state for all the world, god bless the love and the lovers. Thank you MoonRide*r* for give us JUST A MOMENT, to enjoy, and Teshka for inspiring such beautiful feelings.

Hey mexi. You're welcome, thanks for reading and thank you for such a nice comment!

Certainly your best. It reminds me of...

Hold me not hard
with the softness of soulwind,
caress me gently with feathers of joy;
hold me and handle
with love sweet and gentle,
deep and free from wayward woe.

Thanks man. Sorry it took me so long to see this, but I was taking a few days of "sabbatical" from the Internet for multiple reasons, and most of them good ones I hope.

What is that quoted from?

with the softness of soulwind,
caress me gently with feathers of joy

Yeah.

Ah. I found your old blog earlier in a search, but didn't realize it was you and I wasn't sure if it was a quote from somewhere else. Çok mersi

@Orchestrainside: That's absolutely a beautiful poem:WOW!

"with the softness of soulwind
caress me gently with feathers of joy"

Thanks for brightening a sombre autumn afternoon


Cok güzel, cok merci, as Moon's saying goes there

Originally Posted by MoonRide*r*

I love this!
Pleeeease tell me people that it's at least "ok"

*Shameless Bump*

Oh man. I cant even summon any mean comments. Not even one.
lol brb just crying

It's perfect. Just like the one it was written for.

Originally Posted by VivaPalestina

Oh man. I cant even summon any mean comments. Not even one.

No worries Viva, I'm sure you'll find just the right words soon enough

Originally Posted by VivaPalestina

t's perfect. Just like the one it was written for.

Thank you
But when the inspiration itself is "perfect"... this was one of the easiest few lines I've ever even tried to write.