Amaryn's poems 2012

Thank you, Frankie, for taking the time to comment on various of my poems!

Thanks also for the beautiful picture, fitting well to my poem "dream". You must have a real arsenal to find something like that!

"Emotions" actually - why would I not reveal it - has a background of my concern, how many people I have met who are actually
suffering from loneliness and at the same time certainly there are some feelings mixed into it by what I have experienced moving
from one country to another, with the exception of Greece, where people have been warmhearted and helpful right from the beginning.
Moving from there to the North of Europe has been the toughest of all!
As our society is "getting gray" at a horrifying speed it can be expected that the problem of people left alone is on the increase.

"Did you Say Love" I would say is neither cold nor sad: it is the moment of falling in love described in simple words. Maybe the one is shy and hopes/waits for the other to "break the ice", but I do not regard that as a sad thing. I could maybe have worked out that picture better. It would have asked for a kind of refrain referring to the "jubilation" that -o yes, now I knew you are in love with me, thank you, I was to shy to tell you first

"two weeks at a time" is indeed a rather personal one. It is not pride that is reflected in "as you stil don't know me". It is how we feel it. She sees me as a novel with many unread pages. She dislikes boredom a lot. And actually I could be proud that after many years together she still sees me that way (and believe me, it's the same the other way around,lol! )

In "observations" you have made an interesting comment how a chorus might maybe be a good idea. I am gonna try! Thanks for it all. You have really spent your time reading these poems. It encourages to continue.

Thanks for sharing, amaryn. This helps me to see the poem through the artist's eyes, the one that really counts--a different perspective from mine. It opens my mind to ways of thinking and understanding the differences in people. Of course, I would read it first from my own experiences. Now I am reminded that poems need to be considered from other angles. . . . Perhaps considering, "why would this be so?" "What other factors might influence why this seems 'cold'?" . . . Or that the female counterpart enjoys the enigma--pointing to a very bright woman who otherwise could be easily bored. (And I did not know that it went two ways!--all the difference in the world.)

As far as the photo . . . I "see" music, poems, stories when I read or hear them. So when reading about the woman on the dead-end lane, in my imagination she was on the lonely lane at Mespelbrunn Castle. Its picturesque but remote locale and somewhat sad feel, complete with swans, was easily brought forth from my memory! The words conjured it, so it was easy to share.

willows weep
and in night cradles sleep
thoughtless toddlers
oaktrees above
whisper and dance
"never we can get enough"

philosophers add
to deeper thoughts said
worrisome lines
leaves twirl down
unstoppable process
of something which makes them frown

glaciers melt
and wise men expelled
don't say yes or no
icebirds protest
not even a whisper
whereto they now want to go

amaryn: Once again, very good; thoughtful poem. I would enjoy hearing your meaning on the first stanza, though--insights into the meaning. I do make an association with the "rock-a-bye-baby" song. It's up to you if you wish to reveal.
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P.S. - "worrisome" and "twirl"

From now on I'll be twirling, Frankie

The name of the song is nightmare. Indeed as you refer to rock-a-bye-baby I looked at it on Wikipedia and there can be
discovered a strong connection: the everywhere present danger looming over "thoughtless toddlers": what if
While willows weep oaktrees dance!

At the same time the second and third stanza refer to a problem our planet is facing already and I think you know what I mean

Yes, I clearly received the 2nd and 3rd stanzas; the 1st I was unsure of . . . yet I had an inkling!! You just hit another ball out-of-the-park!! (Baseball "hit" for the best!) Thank you.

Deep...........are you trying to out-heavy Frankie's Black Orb?Love the last stanza.Didn't you know Global Warmings' a Myth?lol
Ah,but the things we DO believe in!

Morning Doug Lol, a myth go and visit the Northpole and see for yourself Well, of course we can claim that deserts were forests and
forests deserts a very long time ago, but then there weren't 7 miljard people,lol!
Good question: do we want eternity?

Eternity: another myth?Who knows,I for one don't care,I live for today.(and don't worry about tomorrow,hey,hey,hey!)

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Eternity: another myth?Who knows,I for one don't care,I live for today.(and don't worry about tomorrow,hey,hey,hey!)

DOUG: The Doors just said it singing: got also the "deja vu" vibes,lol?

[QUOTE=amaryn;972381]DOUG: The Doors just said it singing: got also the "deja vu"
What song did you post?I've got a cross thru the "button!"

That's the Doors: "People are strange". So are YT policies at times,lol

she is like a talking flamingo
passing me every day
it would do her good
a little more food
but she waves that nonsense away

she stops in front of a window
to look at herself ,of course
her lipstick I think
is kind of pink
and she laughs like a unhappy horse

she follows trends like a shadow
restless feet, day after day
and what she reads
she believes she needs
that's what I think anyway


PS: these observations made last summer in town

Amaryn;Re;Observation 2,
I LOVE this!!!This is right up my alley!"a little more food"they have a saying here"you can never be too rich or too thin!"I don't know about you but I like thin women.But,that's me!Again,great poem!

Amaryn, as I might have already told you, you have such an elegant and natural way to write that it calls for a re-reading, and even many re-readings! Emotions is my favorite poem so far, and it gives me goosebumps everytime I read it...

I especially like this two lines of your last poem, powerful ones!

"she follows trends like a shadow
restless feet, day after day"

You have my best encouragement to keep writing!!

I love writing! I hope by criticism and encouragement to develop even further. Therefore thanks, Enoo!

No enigma with this poem, amaryn. It's straight up. And true. Great "observation"!! This one could go right into the poetry books for 2012, easily. I agree with what was said about the phrasing and wording. I find not a thing to change about it. Well done!!!!

when darkness has reached
the caves of the mind
and the hand on your shoulder is false
when arrogance dries up a smile that seemed kind
it is time to start dancing a waltz

a waltz makes forget you the fury you feel
the impotence towards the past
the slowness of wounds, inflicted , to heal
so dance a waltz, but dance it fast

time's on the run, don't linger too long,
there's still so much you can do,
listen, your heart's beating so strong
and best of all, know that it is you

once you were my lover
now you are my friend
once there was pure passion
but now you understand
digging deep inside me
you see me as a tree
facing storms and seasons
standing tall - that's me



"fait accomplis" could be translated as "a statement based on an observation"