Bottom Line Man

I'm breaking ice
I'm drawing blood
tried to be nice
Now I'm slinging mud
I tried to be good
But the stuff hit the fan
I knew it would
I'm a Bottom Line Man

I'm a Bottom Line Man
I say what I mean
I get to the point
I can be real mean
I get to the point
I make my stand
Get out of my way
I'm a Bottom Line Man

I hated school
I hated the war
I hated my job
I hated divorce
Don't tell me no lies
Criticize what I do
One wrong word
I'll be coming for you

I'm a Bottom Line Man
I say what I mean
I get to the point
I can be real mean
I get to the point
I make my stand
Get out of my way
I'm a Bottom Line Man

Jim Colyer ascap

I really like the chorus in this and the 2nd verse roles right off the tongue, and the flow of the song as a whole is really good. I don't know if you are finished with it or not but I feel like it needs a little more at the end also I feel that using "I get to the point" twice in the chorus is a bit redundant I would suggest finding a different word or line to fill that cap in order to add to the already really good chorus. Great song!

Hey Jim,

I can hear it,

I like your opener! Sweet and to the point. "bottom line man!

I do wish you would change out one of the "I get to the point " in the chorus. I think you could put more real estate in there...my only serious concern is you didn't make him redeeming, so what if hes a bottom line man whats it to me that he can be a jerk and tells it like it is with no feeling for others. How can it be twisted to make him redeeming.

Good Song."And that's the bottom line,because Stone Cold said so"!

Originally Posted by KathyB

Hey Jim,

I can hear it,

I like your opener! Sweet and to the point. "bottom line man!

I do wish you would change out one of the "I get to the point " in the chorus. I think you could put more real estate in there...my only serious concern is you didn't make him redeeming, so what if hes a bottom line man whats it to me that he can be a jerk and tells it like it is with no feeling for others. How can it be twisted to make him redeeming.

No redemption for this guy. He's a loser!

Lol...

Really like the song
Get what ya mean
Sayin' nuthin' wrong
I wanna live long.

F.J.

Originally Posted by RickeyJoe

It's short, simple and to the point. I like it. It would probably be fairly easy for a vocalist with the structure. That's a good thing. A lot of my songs would be difficult for some vocalists so bravo, fine job ya did.

Thanks!

straight to the point