Kristen

Verse
Took a bite of chocolate
Quickly locked the door
Knew she could be ticketed
Was running late on time
Her purse was closed
She was holding
Chocolate wrapped in
Gold and white
“What to do with this” she though
Until she saw the wipe

Chorus
Kristen parked her car downtown
All day long
Left it unattended in A
No parking zone
Slipped a white wrapper 'neath her
Windshield wiper
Later wondered why the meter
Maid hadn't ticketed her

Verse
Reaching out, she lifted gently
And laid the bloc upon
The windshield, Then she snapped it Into
Place And ran along
Off to meet the judge For now
Beg for mercy, maybe
But on returning To her Car
Kristen was Amazed


Chorus
Kristen parked her car downtown
All day long
Left it unattended in A
No parking zone
Slipped a white wrapper 'neath her
WinDshield wIper
Later wondered why the meter
Maid hadn't ticketed her

Verse
Now, her meeting with the judge A
Matter of the ReCord
And it having Been to Kristen's
Benefit she'd Kept
As the judge had Squashed a Parking
Ticket from beFore
Kristen looked around, lifted
The Wiper and beGot
The Bloc of chocolate still in place
And took another bite

Chorus
Kristen parked her car downtown
All day long
Left it unattended in A
No parking zone
Slipped a white wrapper 'neath her
WinDshield wIper
Later wondered why the meter
Maid hadn't ticketed her

What a great opening line...
I took a bite of chocolate quickly locked the door.

I think this should be AABA you are telling a story you need more time in the verses to be clear, with the first or last line being your hook...Kristen parked her car downtown might work if you work with the emotions and situation of why she is downtown and why I should care about that. Letting us know the maid hadn't ticketed her isn't anything to draw me in and go ahhh or OMG. You have the furniture now you need the emotional lines. Whats in the song for the listener? What can I connect with?

I hope this helps some.