Can you read?

This is a very experimental piece, hope you like it
Comments are appreciated.

Can you read?

A

Telescopic clouded scenery
Resting, invoked by
Unearthly material colors, shaping
Tracks in muddy patterns, a
Hologram for reflection

Unleash your masquerade
Nothing to hide behind
Folded hands, only
Ordeals to create
Look at the now and
Derive from perfection
Seek and find, what lingers deep inside.

An abrupt occurrence of verbs, enigmatic
Senses revoked, the scope calculates

Eternal word plays
Dense is a mind
Elastic strings, binding the whole
Nether forms a chord

Eerie thoughts
Corresponding letter traps
Hordes, codes
Oracle chants
Eclectic ways, dancing in a cryptic mass
Steadfast, riding onward to paradise

Read once for now and thoroughly enjoyed it. Will read again later to get deeper meaning . . . Thanks. Very good poem!

Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine

Read once for now and thoroughly enjoyed it. Will read again later to get deeper meaning . . . Thanks. Very good poem!

Thanks

I don't suppose you saw the hidden words did you?

Originally Posted by Eccer

Thanks ... I don't suppose you saw the hidden words did you?

No, I didn't. Sorry I missed that important element!

No need to be sorry. I tried to form the lines according to the words, not sure how it worked out, but it was fun to write it and challenging

What does the outsiders perspective think?

Now that I'm properly informed (because I did not pick up on the cues!), first I'd like to say: How appropriate that this is an acrostic poem because of the reference to Eden! Several of the Hebrew Psalms also used this technique (the Hebrew alphabet, reading right to left, of course--beginning with 'a'leph). Since the Psalms are songs, it's possible that the Hebrew acrostic helped as a memory aid to the temple singers who sang with no sheet music!--especially the very long Psalm 119!

More later, as I want to absorb your meaning and comment on that . . .

Very cool.At first I thought you took a bunch of darts and threw them at a Dictionary.Now that I read the "other"message,all I say say is cool!Also;great aim!

Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine

Now that I'm properly informed (because I did not pick up on the cues!), first I'd like to say: How appropriate that this is an acrostic poem because of the reference to Eden! Several of the Hebrew Psalms also used this technique (the Hebrew alphabet, reading right to left, of course--beginning with 'a'leph). Since the Psalms are songs, it's possible that the Hebrew acrostic helped as a memory aid to the temple singers who sang with no sheet music!--especially the very long Psalm 119!

More later, as I want to absorb your meaning and comment on that . . .

Very interesting! I've been wanting to do an acrostic poem for some time. I was actually considering doing the whole alphabet,
but I found it to complicated, and therefore it ended up like this instead --> http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/po...ns-armpit.html

A little less complicated than Psalm 119 xD

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Very cool.At first I thought you took a bunch of darts and threw them at a Dictionary.Now that I read the "other"message,all I say say is cool!Also;great aim!

Thanks

The words give more meaning when you see through it, and that was the whole point. Sometimes you just have to jump into the haze and dance till you find it's essence.

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Very cool.At first I thought you took a bunch of darts and threw them at a Dictionary.Now that I read the "other"message,all I say say is cool!Also;great aim!

DARTS THREWN AT A DICTIONARY!, DOUG! I saw it that way too. I think Eccer got us all there......

Just good fun - and more than that, Eccer! THANKS

You know,I enjoy putting a smile on people's faces.I'm glad you appreciated my Comment!Sometimes folks around here are so serious.......that I hope they"take me as I am!"(Copyright Tessongs)

Tess will honour you, for sure: it's a stiff battle amidst the avalanches of TV spots telling us what to do next, what to like, what to buy

Well, I wasn't expecting this much views, thanks I guess?