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    Experimentalist said:

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    Anothe short one, hope you can get the rhyme scheme as its written. Enjoy



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    We gotta leave
    I can feel them breathing down my neck like they're standing right in front of me
    Can feel the net close
    grab your running shoes
    You should know that this is one race that we cannot afford to lose
    But now my hope
    like the soles of my shoes
    Is wearing thin, I give in, I surrender, i lose
    but i feel no pain
    nothing at all
    Just a bottomless pit and an endless fall
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Ex,I like this,now couldn't you expand on it a little.I'm not trying to tell you how to write,you know.But this seems like a great start to something that could be a Masterpiece.Think about it.