A call away

If you feel your heart is broken and you cannot shake the pain;
If you long to see the sunshine through the ever pouring rain;
If your eyes are red with crying and you wish the tears would end;
Reach out to me,
I'll always be,
a call away my friend.

Very sweet!You should turn this into a song.This verse would be hard to match,it's that good.It could be an excellent chorus if you could think of some more to add.

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Very sweet!You should turn this into a song.This verse would be hard to match,it's that good.It could be an excellent chorus if you could think of some more to add.

Hmm. That may be a good idea, I might just do that. Thanks for coming in to read it Doug, I appreciate it.

My pleasure.
12/16 After returning here to re-read this,I sincerely hope you turn the above into a Refrain/Chorus.
This is SO GOOD.Writing verses could be a challenge,but one I know you're up for.Please consider turning this into a song,it's half way there.

Hi LooknGlass!

I agree with Doug there: I see this as a chorus, very strong as such, around which the rest of the text should/could be written.
If you do so, I'll be looking forward to it.
But if you don't : it's not lost.

Thanks!