I wrote this song about a suicidal best friend. I'm thinking about recording it for her but I'm really judgy about my songwriting skills. So any help would be very grateful as I'd like to at least give her the lyrics soon. Please go easy on me.
lookin at the mirror
you swear its the last time you do
cause when it happens
all of these thoughts come back to you
rushing through your mind
telling you lies
and you think theyre true
but everyone knows its just you
hold your head up
because i know the real you
behind the tears and the cries
theres a beautiful person in there too
lookin at the mirror
you swear its the last time you do
cause when it happens
all these thoughts come back to you
just one cut
itll be okay
but then it develops into a habit everyday
and it completely consumes you
hold your head up
because i know the real you
behind the tears and cries
theres a beautiful person in there too
please stop for me
your friends and family
we all need you
because we've got problems too
hold your head up
because i know the real you
behind the tears and cries
theres a beautiful person in there too
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The Real You
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I like it. It made me really sad...I think the 1st verse is a little confusing. Maybe you could add a little more details to tell us what happens, why she is doing what she does,why she is feeling this way etc. I think you're a good writter. You should me more confident.
