Tell me what you think about the song I just wrote and how I could improve it. Please keep in mind its the first song I ever wrote and I know its not very deep, but I feel it has some potential. Its supposed to sound similar to Blink-182.
I saw her standing over there
And I Acted like I didn't even care
I didn't know what I should say
I just wanted everyone else to go away
So I went home and I watched tv
And I wondered what she didn't see in me
Called my boss and said I wasn't coming in
Why the f*** does she like him?
I just wish that you could see
That you should always be with me
That we were meant to be
(Chorus)Together forever
Lets do this
I'll prove it
Just give me
Just one chance
I'll ask you
To the dance
I get so nervous when I talk to you
The words they slip away and I always fall through
I almost always get lost in your smile
I wish I saw you more than once in a while
Because I know that we should be
(Chorus)