The Whisper

I am the whisper in the night
I am the whisper in this fight
I am the day that never ends
I am the night that never begins

In this moment I feel the emptiness
The aching hearts the empty bliss
And my heart cries out for something
Something turns out to be nothing

Because I cannot feel this pain within
I can not understand my sin
For I am a man flawed and scarred
And I hold the tool that marred

My skin my flesh and my heart
And I cannot fight for I am not apart
Of this world and it's whispers
This world and it's scars

But I cast a speck of darkness
I cast a whisper of wickedness
For I am just a man
And that is all that I am

I am the whisper in the night
I am the whisper in this fight
I am the day that never ends
I am the night that never begins

Top notch stuff,I like this.

John, hello Here's a poem which reflects a helluva agony.
For me it sounds like "I am the day that never ends / I am the night without defense",
thinking of the fact that a night which doesnot begin can very well be an endless night (insomnia!)

I was wondering, if you at all were intending rhyme in this song/poem.
If it is meant to be singable I tried, but found that difficult.
If going back to the idea of agony, it of course is perfectly OK to leave it as it is

It's just a poem it's not going to be a song maybe aspects of it will be but we will see and I like that line you came up with I was thinking of changing some of the poem.

when insomnia hits you the night indeed never begins (now it's 4 o'clock already and I feel totallt defenseless- there is nothing I can do
about it....It fits well into the picture of agony.....

I could totally sing this, I think poems or every writing in that matter, has a way to be sung somehow Again, a very good piece by you. Kinda reminds me of Kamelot in a way

Eccer, that's interesting! If you can sing this, what sort of rhythm are you thinking of?

Yessss

Well Amaryn. Whatever works I guess? ^^ I am not to... confined by forms and such, as I tend to listen to a lot of progressive stuff. But yes, there are some lyrics which are kinda hard to convey into something. I am especially impressed by this transition http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2KM1_nV5Ayk (The lyrics are in the description.. amazing song/band btw :P)

I like the way Nina Simone and Diana Krall work(ed) their pianos
Suppose you're right: room for interpretation is always good!

Great work, John! You can't be stopped by "this world and its scars". Write on.