Figment of Me (version 2)

Black and white
blend into the night
And I am here left alone
Wondering will I ever be
A figment of me
"Chorus"
At the top of my lungs I scream
Where have you gone
This figment of me
But no answer pours forth
From this sea I'm on
And I lose all my peace
My figment of me


Caught in the ocean
And perilous waves
Wondering will I ever be saved
I look to the sky and see
A figment of me
"Chorus"
At the top of my lungs I scream
Where have you gone
This figment of me
But no answer pours forth
From this sea I'm on
And I lose all my peace
My figment of me


Feel so down I might as well drown
But I can never give up
Because I still believe
That You have saved me
And I know that You
Live within
A figment of me...
A figment of me...
A figment of me...
"Outro"
I wanna be a figment
In a world that's always spinning
In a world I can't
And one day I will be
A figment of me

Now see this, thissssss is beautiful.
The first verse is wonderful and when I read it aloud I got chills. This is a good one, John.

I understand what you're saying. It is always a woman or the absence of a woman that makes us feel this way.

This really is different from the other version.I assumed it'd just be a rewrite.I'm glad your creative,John.(now get famous)

It's not so much a rewrite just a different idea using the whole figment thing I've written 4 different versions of this song the original was one of the first songs I ever wrote. The bridge in the original became the chorus in this version. These past two that I have posted are two new versions.

You mean you Didn't post the first two?I don't believe you!

Haha no I didn't Im not sure where they are.

Originally Posted by Johnb31

Haha no I didn't Im not sure where they are.

So That explains it!!

I want to write music to this one.

Me u and josh could write something.

Wednesday night xD we got this

Outrageous,john. I have overlooked this. Waiting for news about song you intend to write!

We did write it

It's another song

Wait did we write it?

You guys really know how to BUMP your lyrics!

Oooo- I WUV you all! Here is a Major Mix Up, anyway: I liked this version, John, better than nr 1 and I understand Traingirl got
the chills. Obviously, Traingirl, you've not participated in this part as you wrote about it this way. Or am I mistaken there,lol?
However, Doug: John is maybe not so keen at becoming a Star as you perceive: he just keeps trying writing good verses which eventually may
fascinate someone- hold it- I have gone through the circus of managements and songcontests:if I'd write to you about it, it would considerably
brighten up the literary part of this ATL,LOL
IOW: Keep going strong and take it easy, John (and Traingirl: tell us more!)

Retort:if you look at the introduction on Lyrics Review,I do believe it reads,"World fame may start here"So there!I know John would love to have a little fame tossed his way,otherwise he'd just write his songs/poems in a notebook!

I mainly just want to reach as many people as possible with my words. I would like to be famous or more well known because that would help for my voice and words to be heard, but as long as someone gets something out of these words I will continue to write.

Originally Posted by Johnb31

I mainly just want to reach as many people as possible with my words. I would like to be famous or more well known because that would help for my voice and words to be heard, but as long as someone gets something out of these words I will continue to write.

Hear,hear! BUT I understand what Doug writes there: I see it like this:Lyrics Review and Poetry are two little rivers and we are fishermen who
hope to catch something to eat or make acquaintance with other fishermen, talk about fish and fishing, etc.

I certainly am very sarcastic when it comes to writing hits and making it big, which might be unfair in case people are only at the beginning of such
a "dream". Sorry That's not my intention , folks!
So, the main message I put here: keep writing, don't get upset by criticism, it's healthy to get it and you can only learn from it.
Criticism can come as black humour, scepticism, just plain grammatical mistakes, questions about what's meant, accuracy, etc.....
Be courageous and let's build up these lovely and creative threads together!