The Lost Note

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  1. Malay_razor said:

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    The Lost Note

    Sometimes, it just doesnt feel right
    you overlook that one little thing
    the one you're blinded by, day and night.

    Sometimes, that missing piece
    in this puzzle unsolved
    is all that you need to find.

    Somehow, its still on your mind
    You're one,yet incomplete
    No matter how much you tried,over and again.

    It mocks you, time after time
    The uneasiness, always there contemplating
    Desperate to find that missing piece, you're at a dead end.

    But it had always been there with you.
    The secret of it all. The lost note.
    Last edited by Malay_razor; 07-03-2013 at 11:24 PM.
     
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    This has a very.........unique feel to it.Do you sing this or recite it;poem style?If this is to be sung,I'd think about possibly repeating one of the stanzas creating a chorus.Of course,it isn't always necessary(Honesty)but it makes it "appear"more like a song.I like what you wrote,I'd like to figure out how it would be sung.
     
  3. Malay_razor said:

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    I recited this. That's the main issue. Its very difficult to sing it. Will try and figure out a way though. And I appreciate that you liked it!!
     
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    Why didn't you post it on the Poetrty Site?Just wondering.
     
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    curiosity_kills_the_cat said:

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    Be careful of all those poetry hawks.