Dominate

Thread: Dominate

Tags: heavy metal, lyrics feedback, lyrics review, poetry, rock & roll
  1. Tomatomic said:

    Default Dominate

    if you ask;
    then you'll never receive
    cos' I'm just like god!
    a sadist at heart
    I'll watch you squirm
    as the jackboot come crushing down
    i could deliver
    but it's fun to reject
    maybe you'll learn this time!

    I'm a controlling being
    who expects nothing less
    than total subservience,
    love for my hate

    my goal is just this
    death to create
    man kind must learn
    I come, I dominate!!

    try to hide
    from the powers that be
    find out it's all a waste.
    I see all
    from my liars chair,
    a child with daddy's gun
    make your peace
    I couldn't care
    I'm a force that ain't satisfied

    your a weak willed race
    trapped in delusion
    words don't pleasure me
    some kind of illusion

    my goal is just this
    death to create
    man kind must learn
    I come, I dominate!!

    I ... Dominate You!! X3

    I Dominate!!!!

    I'm a controlling being
    who expects nothing less
    than total subservience,
    love for my hate

    my goal is just this
    death to create
    man kind must learn
    I come, I dominate!!
     
  2. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Atomic One,I love the refrain and the fifth stanza.The reason is simple,it has a natural rhythm and it rhythms.I know that you can rhythm,you do it very well.When you choose not to,the verses must be that much stronger in content,in my humble opinion.also the "I Dominate" should have been taken advantage of more; it a strong statement that needs repeating!!Good effort,but I know you can still do better!
     
  3. Tomatomic said:

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    cheers for the input doug!!!!
     
  4. orsen said:

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    This is good, the anger comes through. I liked it