we choosed us

Hey so this is my 20th song i wrote yeah Cheesy ok that's not that much but anyway please tell me what you think about it Smiley

Lyrics:

Do you remember when we just ran away cause we decided to life
Do you remember us in the dark trying to figure out where to go
Do you remember that we were happy

they said it is wrong they said no we didn’t care
they said we don’t have a choice
they said we just can’t be together we didn’t care
there is always a choice they wont accept it we didn’t care
and we choosed us

now 10 years later we’re sitting here together
now we know it was right eventhough i never doubted
no we found our way

they said it is wrong they said no we didn’t care
they said we don’t have a choice
they said we just can’t be together we didn’t care
there is always a choice they wont accept it we didn’t care
and we choosed us

in some way our story is like romeo and juliet (i don't know if juliet is correct? )
but we changed the end
cause no one can decided who your heart chose
and wem ade it, we won the fight of our lifes

they said it is wrong they said no we didn’t care
they said we don’t have a choice
they said we just can’t be together we didn’t care
there is always a choice they wont accept it we didn’t care
and we choosed us
we choosed us

Your 20th song! Congrats! Keep 'em coming, Jane!
I think your Romeo and Juliet-story with a happy ending isn't cheesy at all. I greatly like it!
Just a few grammatical points: I think it's 'chose' instead of 'choosed' and 'live' instead of 'life'(in the first line). And I think it is better to change 'is', in the line "they said it is wrong they said no we didn’t care", into 'was'.

Originally Posted by Peter Both

Your 20th song! Congrats! Keep 'em coming, Jane!
I think your Romeo and Juliet-story with a happy ending isn't cheesy at all. I greatly like it!
Just a few grammatical points: I think it's 'chose' instead of 'choosed' and 'live' instead of 'life'(in the first line). And I think it is better to change 'is', in the line "they said it is wrong they said no we didn’t care", into 'was'.

I noticed that i used the wrong time after i posted it but thank you I just can't memorise when it's life and when it's live. I think i sang it right but i just wrote it wrong.