Cold (1/10/14)

Your composure was strong, but I think it was fake.
Because under the surface you were just about to break.
No, you would have never told a soul,
but if you would have, I wouldnt have told.
Your light is off and you are content.
What once was perfect has now been bent.

Oh.. I dont know why you're so cold.
That's not the person that I used to know.
So tell me, what exactly is your plan?
Or are your intentions not meant for me to understand?

Was it me that took your spirit, that once ran wild and free?
Or did you wake up and realize change is necessary?
We can’t all be winners when we’re running the race,
If you start out too slow, you’ll be winning last place.

I see the tears behind your smile,
I know that you are hurting.
But your pride is standing in the way,
And it’s never been so rewarding.

Oh.. I dont know why you're so cold.
That's not the person that I used to know.
So tell me, what exactly is your plan?
Or are your intentions not meant for me to understand?

I like this song and I really liked the chorus!

Originally Posted by meli2235

I like this song and I really liked the chorus!

Thanks friend! Many of the ideas I wrote down long ago, but then I decided I needed to finish it and put it together!

I like it, too. It reminds me of "Foolish Games" by Jewel.

Originally Posted by Jim Colyer

I like it, too. It reminds me of "Foolish Games" by Jewel.

Ahhh! I LOVE that song!

I really enjoyed reading this. It is well-structured and the flow of words is virtually seamless. The best lines are "So tell me, what exactly is your plan?
Or are your intentions not meant for me to understand?". Perhaps you could use your best lines repeatedly as a great way to end the lyrics. I suggest you change the last line in the third section: "If you start out too slow, you’ll be winning last place."

Sometimes people go into a shell. It is hard to say why.